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Outline-
ReplyDeleteArgument: There should be more paparazzi protection for children who’s parents are in the film industry (in other words celebrities)
Intro/Thesis
- Is it not bad enough that children already have to face the cruelty of what it is to growing up, to being "harassed", "ambushed", and "traumatized" by a mob of men with big black cameras that follow them around "...shouting, arguing, camp[ing] out everywhere...all day, every day, to continue traumatizing [the] kids." Simply because their parents are either award winning celebrities or reality TV show stars. Is that the reason why it's okay to snap pictures of these 'celebrity children' and publicize them on tabloids, magazines and online? According to some celebrity parents like Jennifer Garner, Halle Berry, Kim Kardashian, Kristen Bell and husband Dax Shepard and many other well known celebrities agree that this is no proper way for their child or any child brought upon the spot light to live in. Therefore, they have asked help from fans, and other celebrity parents to come together to stop this from continuing and have also taken to the courts to put a stop/limit to these "lawbreaking photographers."
1st paragraph: (Proponent)
- What is a paparazzi? {What are their laws? What are their rights? Who do they target (and why)?}
- Ethos/Logos
- Things that are limited and prohibited to paparazzi
- "Those who take photos and video of a child without consent and in a harassing manner could face up to a year in county jail and a fine of up to $10,000. They also can be sued for damages and attorney's fees under the new law, which media organizations opposed."
-"The purpose of The Paprazzi Reform Initiative is NOT to limit Freedom of Speech or the Press, but to restore some semblance of the inalienable right to privacy to everyone.”
2nd paragraph: (Proponent)
-Pathos
- Claim/Argument
- Outcome/problem this is leaving kids
- Rights of an individual (minor)
- Evidence/example (Garner/Berry court case & personal views of the celebrity parents)
3rd paragraph: (Opponent)
- Restatement of paparazzi rights
-Rebuttal (celebrities want the attention?)
- Logos/Ethos
- {Words from paparazzi themselves}
4th paragraph: (Proponent)
ReplyDelete- Ethos/Logos/Pathos
- Paparazzi laws in France
- Celebrities moving to France because of stricter rules/laws (better protection)
- "The lines are blurry and debatable, but there's general agreement on the need to shield children from the media glare. To avoid lawsuits, magazines regularly blur out the faces of celebrities' children or simply pull the photos."
Conclusion:
- Solution
- Overall view/sum-up
- etc.
Sources:
#1 "Garner and Berry ask for law protecting their kids from media." UPI NewsTrack 14 Aug. 2013. Criminal Justice Collection. Web. 27 Jan. 2014.
(Relevance: This article talks about both mothers (Garner & Berry) and their concern for their protection of their children , along with their concern for the torment their kids face everyday walking outside of their home.)
#2 "California cracks down on celeb photogs." UPI NewsTrack 1 Oct. 2005. Criminal Justice Collection. Web. 27 Jan. 2014.
(Relevance: In this article it discusses a bill that was signed due to the unprofessional work of paparazzi's that take "aggressive" photos of celebrities. This will be a good source to use because it demonstrates how a paparazzi acts and is throughout the work of photographing a celebrity; this allows me to use it as an example on to comparing it with how they act the same way when it's a child.)
#3 "Halle Berry can't move daughter to France." UPI NewsTrack 10 Nov. 2012. Criminal Justice Collection. Web. 27 Jan. 2014.
(Relevance: In this article it explains how mother, Halle Berry was rejected of sending her daughter Nahla to France due to custodial issues. This is also a good source to use because the article explains how making this decision was hard enough for Berry but harder that this was rejected. All Berry wanted was to send her daughter to France where there is a much safer environment and where paparazzi have stricter laws. -Berry sure is devoted to keeping her daughter safe!)
#4 Goodale, Gloria. "Is California going too far to protect celebrity kids from paparazzi?" Christian Science Monitor 25 Sept. 2013. Criminal Justice Collection. Web. 27 Jan. 2014.
(Relevance: This article has many view points that come straight from professors at different colleges that either agree or disagree with "protecting celebrity children from the paparazzi")
#5
Kristen Bell and Husband Dax Shepard: "We had always had an agreement that when this little thing came into the world, all bets were off, no pictures would happen," Bell told TODAY Friday in an exclusive interview. "We now have a duty as parents to protect this little one."
* Both parents throughout the interview discuss their role as celebrities and the role their daughter takes into this environment. Both Parents both strictly testify to their daughter not having any potential connection to the media. Thus, both parents have taken to use twitter as a way to reach out to their fans to boycott and not buy any magazines that contain any photos of celebrity children due to who their parents are. Bell then released the statement that "she will no longer do interviews with magazines that pay photographers to take pictures of celebrities' children" hoping that consumers think about their behavior.
Jernigan, Joy, and A. Pawlowski. "TODAY Moms." TODAY. N.p., 31 Jan. 2014. Web. 02 Feb. 2014.
#6
ReplyDeletePaparazzi Reform: "The purpose of The Paprazzi Reform Initiative is NOT to limit Freedom of Speech or the Press, but to restore some semblance of the inalienable right to privacy to everyone. "
* In this article it briefly explains the right and limits of a paparazzi and how due to centuries ago when the founding fathers created the amendments they wrote them so that throughout the progression of the centuries the branches would be able to flex/expand/shorten the rights. But because of such rights an individual and group are still protected which means it is tougher than what they(founding fathers) predicted it to be. However, this isn't a reason for their to be a stop to the craze of the "paparazzo".
"The PAPARAZZI Reform Initiative - Legal." The PAPARAZZI Reform Initiative - Legal. N.p., 2013. Web. 02 Feb. 2014.
#7 Paparazzi Laws (California): "Those who take photos and video of a child without consent and in a harassing manner could face up to a year in county jail and a fine of up to $10,000. They also can be sued for damages and attorney's fees under the new law, which media organizations opposed."
* Based on new law changes, the punishment(s) and consequences for those(paparazzi) who break the law or fail to respect/follow the new law will be persecuted and be punished by being fined or sent to jail. This new law will will vow to protect the rights of both paparazzo and child. Therefore, no amendments are broken nor taken advantage of.
Phung, An, and Wires. "Pot, Placentas & Paparazzi: New 2014 Laws Run Gamut in U.S." NBC Bay Area. NBC Bay Area, 2 Jan. 2014. Web. 02 Feb. 2014.
#8 Kate Moss mobed at airport with daughter: (a video of supermodel Kate Moss and her daughter at LAX on March 29, 2008...[a] terrifying footage as Kate tries to leave the airport surrounded by police, paparazzi and flashbulbs.)
* This video shows how dangerous and taunting it is for a child to be come-at like that by a group of men yelling while taking pictures. The child in this video seems terrified and confused...and the reaction of other people at the airport is outstandingly disturbing as they too look disgusted by the mob of photographers following Moss and daughter behind a check in desk as both hide under the desk to keep hidden from the paparazzo.
Moss, Hilary. "Kate Moss Paparazzi VIDEO Used As Key Exhibit In California Case." The Huffington Post. TheHuffingtonPost.com, 02 Sept. 2010. Web. 03 Feb. 2014.
#9 Paparazzi Law (France): "The lines are blurry and debatable, but there's general agreement on the need to shield children from the media glare. To avoid lawsuits, magazines regularly blur out the faces of celebrities' children or simply pull the photos."
* Based on this article it talks about how the laws on paparazzi are more strict when publicizing a photo, especially if it's a child. The article states that if a photo of a child and to be published on a magazine, the face of the child is either blurred out or the photo is simply pulled away by authorities. Along the description of the laws, this article provides and example of how Angelina Jolie and Brad Pitt moved to France to protect their children and their expecting twins at that time. (Similar story to Halle Berry wanting to send daughter to France.)
"Tough Paparazzi Laws in France Could Benefit Brangelina." Fox News. FOX News Network, 11 June 2008. Web. 03 Feb. 2014.
Intro/thesis:
ReplyDeleteThere is documented evidence from various civilizations of supernatural beings. There are several moments in time in which sightings have occurred and recorded in history. Looking through the perspective of ancient civilizations, like Egypt, we can see the existence of advanced life, or extraterrestrial beings, helping human beings and their advancement in the world.
Paragraph 1:
Con-
To say that the great human success is because of aliens is unfair. There is doubt in the human potential to do these amazing monuments. Humans are completely capable of building pyramids on their own.
Pro-
Humans have made some glorious creation on their own, i.e the mezquita. TO doubt truly is unfair. However, using math we can stir some questions. There are 2,300,000 rocks that make a pyramid. Workers worked for 20 years. Approx 12 hours a day. There are 365 days in a year.
365(days)*20(years)= 7300 (days)
7300(days)*12(hours)=87600(hours)
87600(hours)*60(min)=5256000 (min)
5256000(min)/2300000(stones)=2.2 stones/min
This means that each of the components, or stones, needed for the pyramid were placed each in exactly 2.2 min apart. While this may seem possible, each stone weighed an average of 40 tons. This is an average so some weighed less, but it also meant that some weight more. How can Egypt construct such monumwnts with the tools they had? Not even current engineers can replicate them,
Paragraph 2:
Con-
Many civilizations appreciated the deformation of heads so that they can stand out. IT is what represented them and divided the classes. There is no way that this has any correlation with aliens. They are only meant for cosmic story telling and that is where the myth began.
Pro-
Where did the idea of stretching their heads come from? Did they all decide one day that they wanted to stretch the head of an infant to show how they are a part of the high class? There had to be an outside influence. Just like the mayans must have had when creating the morden jet airplanes made of gold. Blueprints to aircrafts that were not even thought of at the time. Also the storytelling, all I have to say is fear. Fear is an instinct that has been placed, imprinted into the human mind, for its own survival. We know to stay away from spiders and snakes because it is filtered in our mind that they can cause death. Everything that has a correlation with fear is passed down through generations. Hence, the idea of aliens, even though watered down, is still evident. There Many classic horror icons and other disturbing creatures share common characteristics. Pale skin, dark, sunken eyes, elongated faces, sharp teeth, and the like. These images inspire horror and revulsion in many, and with good reason. The characteristics shared by these faces are imprinted in the human mind.
Many things frighten humans instinctively.
Paragraph 3:
Cons-
There is no evidence that aliens exist. There is no physical proof that they visited earth, or live for that matter. A lot of the alleged evidence stems from people trying to create hoaxes and get famous. Like Dr. Viktor Lubek who said found a mummified alien in an ancient tomb. Later it was discovered that it was a baby that was altered in photoshop.
Pro-
The evidence is everywhere. In eery religion there is always a manifestation of light in the sky. For Christians it is the flaming Chariot that lifted Elijah “to the heavens”. Heavens can also be a synonym for the stars. In the story of Elijah, elisa describes a blinding light and strong winds. In Egypt, there is a god that goes by the name of Aten who is decribed as a bright disk with rays, and at the end of the rays lies human hands. This same figure can be seen in the picture of The Madonna with Saint Giovannino. In the background there is a figure on the right side of Madonna. There is even a man and a dog looking up at it. An image that matches that of the description of Aten, a god that was worshiped in 3000B.C E while the painting was made in the 15th century.
I like your intro but do not see your claim clear. Your first paragraph is good, giving credit to humans. The rest is good. What type of appeals will you be using?
DeleteArgument: Outsourcing overseas hurts the economy for the U.S.
ReplyDeleteIntro:
America the Great? This country is the richest country in the world, so why are there people without jobs. This country is supposed to help it’s citizens achieve the American Dream not take it away. Many companies in this country have participated in outsourcing overseas, due to lower wages and lower taxes. Because of the companies personal gain they have abandoned the locals.Due to overseas outsourcing American Companies are increasing their profit, while on the homefront the unemployment rate is increasing. American companies the participate in overseas outsourcing should make jobs available locally to help fix today’s economy.
Paragraph # 1:
Reasoning from Authority -
"to outsource range from better-serving overseas markets to increasing the competitiveness of American business"(Weidenbaum). Companies in developed tend to outsource overseas because of costs. Companies in want to pay their employees as little as possible. Through outsourcing overseas to mainly underdeveloped countries companies are able to maintain financial stability.
Reasoning From Statistics - “outsourcing customer service is associated with a drop of roughly 1% to 5% in a company's market capitalization,”(Whitaker,Krishnan, and Fornell). Major Companies look to outsourcing as a way to gain more money, but may actually end up losing money depending on the industry their in. Keeping the jobs local could create potential customers and can even fix the economy.
Paragraph # 2:
“American Companies send jobs overseas and bring the profits back to the U.S with very little tax liability” (Jilani). Businesses often send jobs overseas in order to gain more profit and pay a small amount of taxes. Instead of these companies helping out the economy. they are mainly looking out for themselves.
“Today’s Economy has lost over 760,000 jobs”(Obama-Biden). That means that a large amount of Americans are on unemployment, which only provides support for one year. So if that person has not found a job within that timespan, they are left with no funds. What if that person has a family to provide for and can not perform that duty. Due to outsourcing overseas Americans have lost something that this “great” country has promised. A chance at the American Dream.
Paragraph # 3:
“Today, more companies are committed to providing those outsourcing opportunities to companies and professionals within the United States”(Cohen). This article is basically my counterargument. It states that outsourcing is not as big of a problem anymore. It challenges people’s misconceptions about offshoring. Companies are still outsourcing overseas, but they are start to offer those opportunities on the homefront.
“Often, the intent is to take advantage of lower wages and operating costs”(Lach). This article confirms the common misconceptions in regards to outsourcing in overseas. It goes into depth to explain why companies truly outsource in other countries. The main reasons are lower wages and lower taxes on the money that is made in the country. This article also talks about off-shoring which is another way to say outsourcing. It provides statistics for the amount of jobs lost in the U.S to offshoring.
Conclusion: Due to outsourcing overseas many Americans are out of work.Companies need to reflect on their selfish actions, and think of the people. The people need a chance at financial stability.
Outline
ReplyDeleteThesis:
Whether or not the information released on terrorism is true or not? There is a possibility that Saddam Hussein who was supposedly the mastermind behind these attacks may not have been involved and the place we all link to terrorism Iran may not even have a connection to these acts of terrorism. Most Americans just choose to believe what they were told by the president and national government there is evidence that can prove these individuals wrong.
Paragraph 1: What the government released.
The Bush administration view, as defined by the Colin Powell speech before the UN, postulated that there might have been a cooperative relationship, but that Saddam was not supportive of the 9/11 attacks. Powell presented several credible intelligence reports vetted by the Intelligence Community showing contacts between Iraq's Intelligence Service and al-Qaeda. Powell pointed out that Saddam had already supported Islamic Jihad, a radical Islamist group, and that there was no reason for him not to support al-Qaeda. Powell discussed concerns that Saddam may provide al-Qaeda with chemical or biological weapons. The Bush Administration…
• In the initial stages of the war on terror, the Central Intelligence Agency, under George Tenet, was rising to prominence as the lead agency in the Afghanistan war. But when Tenet insisted in his personal meetings with President Bush that there was no connection between Al Qaeda and Iraq, V.P. Dick Cheney and Secretary of Defense Donald Rumsfeld initiated a secret program to re-examine the evidence and marginalize the CIA and Tenet. The questionable intelligence acquired by this secret program was "stovepiped" to the vice president and presented to the public. In some cases, Cheney’s office would leak the intelligence to reporters….
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Reasoning from authority: “Mylroie has an impressive array of credentials that certify her as an expert on the Middle East, national security, and, above all, Iraq. She has held faculty positions at Harvard and the U.S. Naval War College and worked at the Washington Institute for Near East Policy, as well as serving as an advisor on Iraq to the 1992 Clinton presidential campaign.”
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Reasoning from consequences: If Americans believed what the president and government said then there can be evidence that can prove them wrong.
"How likely is it that people in the federal government either assisted in the 9/11 attacks or took no action to stop the attacks because they wanted the United States to go to war in the Middle East?" Nearly 23 percent of Democrats called that scenario very likely, and another 28 percent called it somewhat likely. So, writes Smith, more than half of Democrats considered it at least plausible that 9/11 stemmed from a conspiracy within the U.S. government. (For the nation as a whole, 16 percent said it was very likely and 20 percent said it was somewhat likely.)
Thesis: Censorship should not be only decided by the FCC because it limits the knowledge of people, does not allow parents to raise their children how they want to, and causes the FCC to have too much power on the people.
ReplyDeletePar 1:
"By censoring the media, students are limited with their resources.
It's not just the books under fire now that worry me. It is the books that will never be written. The books that will never be read. And all due to the fear of censorship. As always, young readers will be the real losers."
http://www.worldandi.com/newhome/public/2003/september/mt2pub.asp
Par. 2:
Parents are not allowed to chose properly what they want their child to be exposed to because of censorship.
"But I believe strongly in paying attention. I believe in not being a hypocrite and in weighing in with your kids and in trying to get them to evaluate what they are listening to."
"Parents and leaders have a right and a responsibility to help children locate, evaluate and select appropriate media."
http://familyshare.com/parental-censorship-a-right-and-a-responsibility
Par.3:
Counter Argument: Children will be exposed to sexual references and other inappropriate references with no censorship.
Rebuttal:The English language is abstract and there will always be words to replace those "bad" words.
Par. 4:
By allowing the FCC to chose all censorship, it is giving it too much power.
"Censorship -- the control of the information and ideas circulated within a society -- has been a hallmark of dictatorships throughout history."
Outline
ReplyDeleteTopic: Body Language
Introduction
Hook: Body Language is universal. It is the emotion, latin for movement, of the body and a result of brain activity.
Thesis: Body language sends a clear message.
Paragraph 1: Why is beneficial to read body language?
Ethos:Studies have shown that words account for 7 percent of the information communicated. Vocal tone accounts for 55 percent and body language accounts for 38 percent.
Reasoning from authority : Dr. Albert Mehrabian's experiment showed that tone is harder to show an emotion than an expression.
Paragraph 2: Less Social Problems
Pathos: The analysis that goes with body language helps read relationships between lovers, friends and Parents with children.
Reasoning from Comparison: What would be more effective when figuring out an emotion, the tone of voice or face expression? The experiment that Albert Mehrabian carried out mentioned that facial expression was approximately 1.5 times more important than tone of voice in judging the attitude of the speaker.
Reasoning form consequences: If people knew how to read and analyze body language there will be less divorces, break ups and fights.
Paragraph 3: Decoding and inside the brain of Body language
Reasoning from example: It is easier to see when someone is mad by the way they walk and their facial expression. It is more obvious to see then to hear the anger that person has.
Paragraph 4: Counter argument
the Difference between Direct and indirect Communication.
Rebuttal: If people knew how to read body language, indirect communicators would not be misunderstood
Paragraph 5
Conclusion: A gather of all of the claims.
Restatement of my thesis
Tie it all together.
Paragraph 1.
ReplyDelete-Reasons for late abortion exist such as being unaware of the pregnancy.
A 13-year-old girl was a victim of incest by her uncle who had lived with the family for six months. By the time the girl's mother discovered her pregnancy, she was 17 weeks along. Her quiet demeanor, interpreted by her mother as ideal behavior, unfortunately delayed the detection of her pregnancy. We performed her abortion, but the family was understandably deeply shocked by the circumstances of the abortion.
-Because she can know as early as two weeks which is how long it takes for implantation ,and fertilization of egg, to take place. She then can take a pregnancy test to determine the official pregnancy by the HGC (human chorionic gonadotropin) a hormone produced by a component of a fertilized egg.
And if one does not do so there are signs hinting at pregnancy such as:
fatigue
tender breast
bloating
spotting
food aversions
head-/ backache
Morning sickness and Nausea are one of the most universal pregnancy symptoms, affecting up to 85% of pregnant women. It's the result of hormone changes in the body, and it can last through the entire first trimester.
Paragraph 2.
-When will we Americans face up to the fact that it's better to proactively prevent conception rather than abort a fetus at the back end of that conception? (safe sex)
-96 percent of those abortions represent a secondary form of birth control. That means they did not have access to birth control on the front end. It means they either couldn't feed a child, shelter it or provide for it—or they already had birthed too many children they couldn't feed or care for.
Paragraph 3.
-If not allowed, can lead to back alley abortions.
-The number of women who died from abortions prior to legalization has been drastically exaggerated; furthermore, women still die each year from complications of legal abortions. He concludes that legal abortion has not improved women's health, emphasizing the adverse impact it has had on both women and their unborn children. Forsythe is the president of Americans United for Life, an organization that opposes abortion.
Paragraph 4.
But probably the biggest benefit of legalized abortion and the one with the greatest impact is that the number of unwanted children is decreasing. Children who are abused, brutalized, or neglected are more likely to become neurotic, psychotic, or criminal elements of society.
Morality- they are human and deserve to live
Concluding his statement, President Obama said, "I hope that we will recommit ourselves more broadly to ensuring that our daughters have the same rights, the same freedoms, and the same opportunities as our sons to fulfill their dreams." Let us commit ourselves to ensuring that our sons and daughters have the opportunity to live; an opportunity cruelly snatched away from more than 50 million human beings since the day the president commemorated
Paragraph 5.
Procedures- more dangerous as time progresses
D&X is most commonly performed between 20 and 24 weeks and thereby raises questions of the potential viability of the fetus. Information from 1988 through 1991 indicates a 15% viability rate at 23 weeks gestation, 56% at 24 weeks, and 79% at 25 weeks.
Conclusion: Restatement of thesis.
Thesis: Although abortion has been made legal since the landmark case Roe vs Wade in 1973, it should be made completely illegal to terminate the life of an unborn human after the first trimester unless it poses a threat to the mother’s life.
DeleteSources:
DeleteWooldridge, Frosty. "Abortion, Birth Control, Common Sense, and Reality." 2011. Rpt. in Birth Control. Ed. Margaret Haerens and Lynn M. Zott. Detroit: Greenhaven Press, 2012. Opposing Viewpoints. Opposing Viewpoints in Context. Web. 4 Feb. 2014.
Forsythe, Clarke D. "Legal Abortion Is Not Necessary to Protect Women's Health." Women's Rights. Ed. Shasta Gaughen. San Diego: Greenhaven Press, 2003. Contemporary Issues Companion. Rpt. from "Abortion Is Not a 'Necessary Evil,'." Christianity Today (24 May 1999). Opposing Viewpoints in Context. Web. 5 Feb. 2014.ortion.
Deem, Rich. "Partial-Birth Abortions Should Be Banned." The Abortion Controversy. Ed. Emma Bernay. Detroit: Greenhaven Press, 2007. Current Controversies. Rpt. from "D&X (Partial Birth) Abortions." www.godandscience.org. 2006. Opposing Viewpoints in Context. Web. 5 Feb. 2014.
Argument: Mothers should stay at home and look after their children
ReplyDeleteIntro/Thesis: Old History
A women’s role has always been considered as a sacred figure in many religions. Women should praised for being privileged in having a God-given position that fathers do not have, which is a housemother. The bible specifically testifies that women should be the “keepers of the house” (Timothy 5:14 and Titus 2: 4-5). These gospels also explain that the women should bear children and care for them the way the Lord has set out for them. Women are also praised for their hard work and dedication in successfully raising their children at home, which is valued more than working (Proverbs 31:28-31). Not only are Catholic women set out to be housemothers, but the Quran as well praises mothers. Muhammad is even quoted for saying that “paradise lies at the feet of your mother”. (17:23, 31:14, 46:15). A Islamic Scholar Majmoo' Fatawa wa Maqalat Mutanawwi'ah, dissects these scriptures in the Quran as saying that a “mother is to be given precedence over and above a father”. In order for a mother to receive this honor she must stay at home which means that she must not try to be employed anywhere else
These examples that come from the oldest written testaments have been the bases of the existence of patriarchy. Beginning with the story of Adam and Eve, Adam is first created then the animals and then Eve is born from a part of Adam demonstrating that he is like a parental dominant figure. This idea of male dominance is consistent with history that “men learned to institute dominance and hierarchy over other people by their earlier practice of dominance over the women of their own group” (Pateman 1989, p. 451). The ealiest systems of laws also coordinate with this patriarchy creation that was enforced by state and agreed upon by women that stated that “force, economic dependency on the male head of the family, class privileges bestowed upon conforming and dependent women of the upper classes, and the artificially created division of women into respectable and not-respectable women” (Lerner 1986, p. 9).” Although this idea has been attacked by many femisnist saying that women can do the same thing as men can, women are still not paid the same as men and given the same opportunity for promotions. If women want to be considered for the same pay, promotions, benefits, and other economic rewars they must “reach their goals by emulating men, thus reproducing the masculine traits and characteristics that are associated with success.”
"Patriarchy." International Encyclopedia of the Social Sciences. Ed. William A. Darity, Jr. 2nd ed. Vol. 6. Detroit: Macmillan Reference USA, 2008. 173-174. World History in Context. Web. 4 Feb. 2014.
1st topic: American history of Women
In American history the role of a woman has been laid out. This was made in order to make sure that women embodied the highest potential that typical American mothers can portray at the time. “First, that she be a successful mother as evidenced by the character and achievements of her children. Second, that she be an active member of a religious body. Third, that she embody those traits highly regarded in mothers: courage, patience, cheerfulness, affection, kindness, understanding, and a
homemaking ability. Fourth, that she exemplify in her life and conduct the precepts of the Golden Rule. Fifth, that she have a sense of responsibility in civic affairs and be active in service for public benefit. Sixth, that she be qualified to represent the Mothers of America in all responsibilities attached to her role as the National Mother” History has set the example to show that men are the ones who should have the all might power. They are the ones who should provide for the family and the women are the ones who produce and have the natural skills to nurture their children.
ReplyDelete1.
Citaition"American Mothers, Inc." Tradeshows Worldwide. Ed. Matthew Miskelly. 31st ed. Detroit: Gale, 2013. 1333 pp. 3 vols. Gale Directory Library. Gale. Inglewood Public Library. 29 Jan. 2014
2nd topic: Currently there are many women who don’t follow the norms that have been set out to them in history. In the United States according to the United States census Bureau there are 85.4 million mothers and only 5million decide to stay at home and care for their children. The rest of the 80.4 million mothers turn to others to care for their children, which sometimes included the 75,396 childcare centers that help them “juggle motherhood and career”.
United States Census Bureau http://www.census.gov/newsroom/releases/archives/facts_for_features_special_editions/cb12-ff08.html
These childcare centers are usually where mothers have to turn to because they believe that they need to provide for their family financially. The problem with this is that mothers don’t realize how expensive childcare is if they don’t have a relative that will do them the favor of caring for them. “Childcare is so expensive that financially a mother working is no better”
BBC News, 'Childcare 'may not lessen poverty''
http://news.bbc.co.uk/2/hi/uk_news/england/london/3198412.stm
Not only is childcare seen as a good resort but many people that Nurseries are seen as a positive environment for children because they are able to form relationships with students so when they go to primary school they have friends. They also will be more mature and comfortable with the environment. A child psychologist Oliver James disagrees with this statement saying that “‘while nursery care may do no harm to about two-thirds of children, there is undeniable evidence that the experience is highly stressful and can be harmful’ also Professor Sylvana has admitted that students who attend childcare at an early age, create a stronger aggression when they attend school.
Jamieson, ‘Toddlers benefit from nurseries’
3rd topic: When mothers stay at home it is more beneficial.
Mothers who stay at home are best for the children. “Attatchment theory” authors like Donald Winnicott and John Bowly are psychologists who believe that attachment to the mother is “essential to normal social and emotional development in the child”. If a mother stays at home they will be able to create a strong loving bond with the children to ensure that they know when the child is happy and feeling sad. When the
child grows up, the housemother will be able to know when their child is tardy, absent, and notice problems. They also will be involved in child’s activities in school- PTA meeting, sports events, field trips etc.
ReplyDeleteBowlby and King, 'Fifty Years of Attachment Theory: Recollections of Donald Winnicott and John Bowlby.'
Counterargument: Many believe that a young girl needs a strong women role model that is her mother. It is very important for a daughter to dream to have a “successful career and a family”. The problem with this is that mothers tend to get caught up with all the work they have during the day and when they get home for work. They have the right intention, but they don’t execute it well by paying more attention to work instead of the most important factor of their life which is their children. Also if mothers have sons, the son needs a good role model as well, but if both parents are preoccupied with their work then in the end the children will be neglected by both parents.
Hoffman, 'The Effects of the Mother's Employment on the Family and the Child'
In many current magazines women have recorded their autobiographies and explained how much they struggled without a mother figure there.
Virginia Ironside received criticism about being anti-feminist and old fashioned for writing on a blog that women should stay at home with her child. She responded with these points. This evidence shows present time understanding of the situation of whether women should stay at home or work:
“But if there was a choice, how many of us could argue against the intrinsic, biological bond between mother and child? Isn’t the kindest, most humane and positive approach to let baby be around you, Mummy, with your familiar smell, sound and touch?”
“When I hear of mothers going straight back to work after having a baby, I wonder, if they can’t bring themselves to look after their tiny, helpless baby in those precious early days, why on earth do they bother having children in the first place?”
“which made me feel so insecure, so unstable.”- This is how she felt when her mom neglected to pay attention to her because she was working on her fashion designs with her clients all day.
“I remember myself sitting outside that living room for hours on end, kicking my heels against the chair on which I sat, desperate for some attention from Mother.”
“she’d found there was nothing as fulfilling and absorbing as looking after a baby. Although it was more demanding, it was far more interesting and fulfilling than her
job, and beat working in an office hands down.” This is a quote from another mother and her experience form staying at home.
ReplyDeleteI didn’t want my baby to feel the neglect I did. But, more than this, I didn’t want to break the instinctive, intuitive connection with my child.
http://www.dailymail.co.uk/femail/article-2402410/Why-suddenly-taboo-say-mother-stay-home-babies.html#ixzz2sPbXc75g
Also this young girl ran away from home and messed up her life completely. She always wanted to be loved by her mom, but she didn’t have a strong connection with her because she was never around. She believes if her mom was around she would have done something with her life. This helped my argument because it goes to show that mothers truly affect the outcome of children and they should be involved more
''We only have one mother,'' Ms. Ward said from behind tinted sunglasses, her voice breaking. ''God forbid she dies and I have no relationship with her.''
Citation: Rosenbloom, Stephanie. "Fighting for Independence And a Mother's Acceptance." New York Times 25 Nov. 2004: B6. U.S. History in Context. Web. 29 Jan. 2014.
My personal experience: I grew up with a mother who worked long hours. I wouldn’t see her in the morning and my dad would have to take me to school. It was difficult for my dad because he didn’t know how to dress me right or even fix my hair into a simple braid. I remember being made fun of for having pen marks in my hair because my dad had used a blue ink pen to make a partition in my hair. I would then come out of school only to have my aunt pick me up. My aunt is a terrific woman, but she was one of the worst babysitters I know. She would cook and clean after us perfectly, but she gave us too much liberty. I would do nothing but horrible things with my cousin like watch my older cousins rated R movies he would leave in his room at age 6. By the time my mom picked me up around 6 she would pay her and I would go home only to have my mom go directly to sleep. I understand she was tired and needed rest, but I needed a mother to care for me. I remember constantly going on top of her to wake her up opening her eyelids, pulling her hair, but she wouldn’t cooperate. She would spend countless hours sleeping there until it got late and it was time for me to sleep. I now understand that my mom was working so much to provide for me, but at the time I was angry feeling neglected by who I thought was the one that loved me the most. Now that my mother no longer works I feel like I am finally establishing a connection with her that I wish I had a long time ago.
In the United States women are still praised for their hard work not in the work field, but at home caring for their children. .
The purpose of this website is to praise the mothers who are doing things right. They put their children as their top priority. This website helps my argument because the UN is praising the women who are doing things correctly.
Topic: Rape Culture
ReplyDeleteI. Introduction
a.“Rape Culture is the worst kind of teacher our kids are learning the most from. It teaches women that it’s their responsibility to not get raped. It teaches men that boys will be boys. It teaches us that a short skirt and a smile is asking for it,” (Terisa Siagatonu and Rudy Francisco).
“Terisa Siagatonu & Rudy Francisco - "Sons" (NPS 2013).” YouTube. YouTube, 09 September 2013. Web. 04 February 2014.
b.Throughout the years media has pointed fingers at women for wearing provocative clothing and drinking excessively therefore putting themselves in situations that call for rape. No one is ever asking to be raped regardless of their clothing, behavior, previous sexual history, or alcohol consumption. There are more factors in the cause of rape, but the blame is always on the perpetuator.
II. First Body Paragraph
Opponents arguments
Telling a woman that binge drinking is perilous, does not mean I’m blaming the victim: “But a misplaced fear of blaming the victim has made it somehow unacceptable to warn inexperienced young women that when they get wasted, they are putting themselves in potential peril.” (Slate).
Rebuttal
It may not be victim blaming, but you’re solely giving the responsibility to the victim: “Calling for young women to become teetotalers as a solution to the problem of rape on college campuses is not only old advice, but also wrongheaded and dangerous. Not solely because, again, drinking does not cause rape, but also because once you begin focusing on the actions and behavior of the victimized you ignore the role of perpetrator. In the case of rape, those perpetrators are men.” (New York Times).
“If a person is unconscious or their judgement is impaired by alcohol or drugs, legally they are unable to give consent. Having non-consensual sex with a person who is intoxicated is sexual assault. Rapists use a variety of excuses to attempt to discredit the women they rape and to justify their crime. No woman asks or deserves to be rape or sexually assaulted. Often a rape case is defined more by the woman's character than by what has happened to her. Newspapers and mass media often refer to women in the roles that they have within society - 'young mother', 'grandmother', 'doctor's wife' etc. If the woman's role or social position is not seen as socially acceptable, she is often held responsible not the rapist. For example, the original 'Jack the Ripper' and Sutcliffe in the late 70's and 80's were glorified by the press. (Jack the ripper has his books, museum, cocktails, computer games and even tourist walks in London named after him where you can visit the places women were murdered!) The rules imposed on women's behaviour allow rapists to shift the responsibility for rape onto women wherever possible, so that most of the perpetrators who rape are seen as victims of malicious allegations, carelessness or stupidity. There is no other crime in which so much effort is expended to make the victim appear responsible - imagine the character or financial background of a robbery victim being questioned in court.” (Rape Crisis)
Overview of Paragraph
How rape culture makes rape okay in the media and victim blames. (Explain)
Describe a news report about a rape and how the perpetrator was being sympathized vs the victim.
Stress the difference between telling women to avoid getting raped and telling men to not rape.
III. Second Body Paragraph
DeleteOpponents arguments
“She was 5-foot-2, 105 pounds, wearing a miniskirt and a halter top with a bare midriff. Now, again, there you go. So every predator in the world is gonna pick that up at two in the morning,” (ThinkProgress).
“Michelle Malkin...At some point these young women have to take responsibility for putting themselves in vulnerable positions,” (Crisostomo).
“Girls should be very careful about what they wear and at what time they move out in city,"Mirje said. ‘Their body language should not invite attention of the potential rapists lurking around in the streets." (Global Post).
Rebuttal
Clothing is not a factor for the cause of rape: “If it were true that the fashion of the day was the reason for the rape of women - then how could it be that rape exists in countries where women are not dressing according to western fashions.”
While finding which country has the highest rape statistic is difficult considering many countries inhibiting reporting (i.g. India), the countries that have repeatedly come up in the list are: India, United States [especially Alaska], and Lesotho. In India, the majority of the women who are raped show little no skin and yet have a high rape statistic; they are third in the world. United States is the number one, but from statutory investigation Alaska has the highest (and still rising) rape numbers especially targeting native women. Lesotho is an African country with women wearing traditional African country and has a high patriarchal society.
“The suggestion of avoiding walking alone, especially at night is a common suggestion to avoiding sexual assault. However, only 9% of rapes are committed by 'strangers'. Women are raped in their homes and in their work places where they are less likely to be believed and even less likely to report. This myth can control movements and restricts freedom. This can feel like women are living under a 'curfew' and that it is a woman's responsibility to be either in or out at certain times. Around 90% of rapes are committed by known men.” (Rape crisis)
Overview of Paragraph:
Clothing is not a factor for the cause of rape and is just used as an excuse for rape which ultimately feeds into this rape culture which ties back to my first paragraph that targets the victim rather than the perpetrator.
VI. Third Body Paragraph
Opponents
Boys will be boys.
Men get these biological urges to rape, they just can’t help themselves.
The rapist had so many prospects.
The rapist is only a child himself.
Rebuttal
DeleteRape Culture: “No, but the reality is that we live in a rape-culture society that enforces the idea that women should avoid getting raped instead of teaching men not to rape” (The Daily Eastern News).
Rapists are sympathized in the media insinuating rape to be justified:“When the verdict was announced, a CNN reporter came close to portraying the rapists as passive victims: “These two young men that had such promising futures, star football players, very good students, literally watched as they believed their lives fell apart.” Other media coverage seemed equally sympathetic to the perpetrators.” (More).
Men can help themselves and stop their urges: “Studies show that most rapes are premeditated i.e. they are either wholly or partially planned in advance. All rapes committed by more than one assailant are always planned. Men can quite easily control their urges to have sex - they do not need to rape a woman to satisfy them. Rape is an act of violence - not sexual gratification. Men who rape or sexually assault does so to dominate, violate and control.” (Rape Crisis)
In reality we live in a patriarchal society that teach men from a young age that dominance and aggressivity is part of being male: “This dynamic finds expression in a number of beliefs about what is natural, acceptable, and even desirable in male-female sexual interaction: that the male will be persistent and aggressive, the female often reluctant and passive; that the male is invulnerable, powerful, hard, and commanding, and that women desire such behavior from men; that “real men” are able to get sexual access to women when, where, and how they want it; that sexual intercourse is an act of male conquest; that women are men's sexual objects or possessions; and that men “need” and are entitled to sex,” (Rebecca Whisnant)
Overview of Paragraph
There needs to stop being excuses for men raping. Rape culture fuels rape excuses and victim blaming by justifying men’s actions because of their gender roles “biologically” given to them.
We need to stop removing men from the equation of rape.
“Our unwillingness to confront men lets this behavior, born of a sense of entitlement and misplaced ideas of what constitutes power, go unchecked. If we stopped blaming binge drinking (or short skirts, or too-high heels, etc.) we could concentrate on having men not just understand that “no means no,” and that all forms of sexual contact require consent, but also learn to reject that force, domination and coercion are natural markers of masculinity and manhood. Until we reckon with those concepts, women will continue being expected to prevent their own rapes.” (New York Times).
V. Conclusion
•Acknowledge both sides of the argument
•Assert my stance on issue
•Why is my stance right
Thesis: Americans strongly believe that college degrees are not effective in today’s world, in a sense of not having enough value for praise. High school students are dropping their hopes of receiving an acceptance letter from their dream university because they believe it’s just to cause people major debt and a piece of paper, instead of a ticket to success. In actuality, a college degree is still valued higher than a diploma because jobs are searching for highly educated people.
ReplyDeleteParagraph 1: David Sirota believes the economy is struggling because most occupations are searching for college graduates rather than students who have only completed high school; in addition, it’s hopeless and pointless for a high school graduate to look for a job in the 21st century.
“… [most state] that the weak economy means the job outlook for college grads “is rather bleak,” it is even more bleak if you don’t have a post-secondary degree…”
http://www.salon.com/2013/08/22/start_funding_college_like_high_school/
Paragraph 2: This particular part is stating that education is one of the elements that is contributing to a student’s future of becoming wealthy (“economic success”). Even though the highest education won’t have enough good paying jobs, some type of education can help a nation’s unemployment rate with a job in general. Education has become a reason because today’s world is built with an economy based on knowledge.
“… an entire [nation] of PhDs and still have not enough good paying jobs. But that doesn’t mean access to higher education has nothing to do with a [student’s] economic success or an individual’s job-market prospects. As the data prove, education is a factor…”
http://www.salon.com/2013/08/22/start_funding_college_like_high_school/
Paragraph 3 (Counterclaim):
Some argue that a “high school diploma is the new college degree” because jobs aren’t accepting college graduates with a Bachelor’s degree or Associate degree, mainly the people with a Master’s or Ph.D.
Rebuttal: The economy will only get better with students with a college degree, no matter the level the degree, but just the fact of receiving higher education shows the attainment of knowledge.
Paragraph 4: As seen, a person with at least a bachelor’s degree has a low unemployment rate, compared to a graduate of high school; a college graduate’s income is higher than just a high school graduate.
“Among those who graduate with a bachelor's degree, unemployment is 4.9 percent — about half the rate of [9.4 percent] those with only a high school diploma. Also, the income of those who have a four-year degree was about $1,000 a week, which is about two-thirds more than high school graduates.”
Paragraph 5:
Conclusion
Restate thesis: Some students do not think of plan after high school that will involve college because of the cost, which will land them in debt, and because of the importance of the degree is not so highly seen as “spectacular.”
The “SO WHAT?!”
Outline
ReplyDelete-Topic: GM Foods
-Essay Opener: “Myths about the dire effects of genetically modified foods on health and the environment abound, but they have not held up to scientific scrutiny. And, although many concerns have been expressed about the potential for unexpected consequences, the unexpected effects that have been observed so far have been benign” by Nina Fedoroff .
-Define/ Give background information on GM Foods
-Thesis: GM foods should not be banned, rather, they should be accepted.
Paragraph #1: Most Americans have eaten genetically modified foods without knowing it, but are they safe?
Opponents-
“Animal testing has found evidence of the following possible health effects of GM foods, according to the American Academy of Environmental Medicine: immune dysregulation, altered liver function, changes in the pancreas, kidney, and spleen.”
“The biggest concern is that there has not been enough testing of GMO’s and no real long term testing to detect possible problems.”
Paragraph #2:
Proponents-
(Reasoning from example)
“Billions of people have eaten genetically modified food over the past two decades. Not one problem has been found.”
“According to the Non-GMO Project, as much as 80 percent of the processed foods available contain GMOs. These are found in ingredients derived from the most common GMO crops, including: Corn: 88 percent (21.2 million hectares) of American corn...Soy: 93 percent (54.4 million hectares)...Cottonseed: 94 percent (9.8 million hectares)...Papaya: 75 percent of Hawaiian papaya....Canola (rapeseed): 90 percent (4.6 million hectares) of canola (used in oil)...Sugar beets: Over 50 percent...”
(Reasoning from authority, testimony, and statistics)
“Bruce Chassy, a professor emeritus of food science and human nutrition at the University of Illinois at Urbana-Champaign, believes that after thousands of research studies and worldwide planting, “genetically modified foods pose no special risks to consumers or the environment” and are overregulated.”
“…[T]he U.S. Food and Drug Administration (FDA) stated that GMOs have been in the U.S. food supply for about 20 years. The agency also stated in a consumer update that "Foods from genetically engineered plants must meet the same requirements, including safety requirements, as foods from traditionally bred plants." Such foods, the FDA added, "are generally as nutritious as foods from comparable traditionally bred plants... [They] have not been more likely to cause an allergic or toxic reaction than foods from traditionally bred plants."
(Rebuttal)
GM plants must meet the same requirements as all other foods, according to the FDA. Agencies that have endorsed the safety of GM foods include the World Health Organization, U.S. National Academy of Sciences, and American Medical Association. Furthermore, a comprehensive analysis conducted at Stanford University found no strong evidence that organic food is more nutritious or less likely to carry health risks compared to conventional foods.
Paragraph #3: Are GM foods detrimental to the environment?
Opponents-
“Bioengineered crops will do wide-reaching damage to the environment. Insect-resistant crops may harm species that are not their target, such as monarch butterflies. On the other hand, the insects that GM crops are designed to kill could develop resistance to those crops, ultimately requiring farmers to use more aggressive control measures, such as increased use of chemical sprays.”
Paragraph #4:
Proponents (rebuttals)-
Genetically modified crops actually help ease environmental impact. Insect resistant GM crops, such as those containing the bacterial Bt gene (which makes the plant itself toxic to key pests), allow farmers to dramatically reduce their use of spray insecticides. In the future, GM seeds may allow farmers to maintain high yields while using less water and chemical fertilizer.
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DeleteParagraph #5: Benefits of GM foods.
ReplyDelete(Reasoning from consequence)
“The world population has topped 6 billion people and is predicted to double in the next 50 years. Ensuring an adequate food supply for this booming population is going to be a major challenge in the years to come. GM foods promise to meet this need in a number of ways.”
(Pathos)
“With an ever increasing global population, massive 3rd world hunger, and with an estimation that a child dies for every two seconds world wide from starvation; this does not even take into account the number of people who are mal and undernourished, there is a great promise in the use of this technology to benefit not only the farmers, but also societies worldwide....Finally, GM foods can create an essential sustainable way to feed the world.
“Modern day’s farmers prefer to cultivate genetically modified food because they get more crops, can grow the crops in any climatic conditions and do not use tons of pesticides annually as consumers do not wish to eat food that has been treated with pesticides due to health hazards. These crops do not rot quickly for which the farmers get more profit.
Conclusion:
-Summarize both views
-Restatement of thesis
-Finish with a rhetorical question
Sources:
"Benefits of GM Food:." GMO. Web. 03 Feb. 2014.
Bijaya. "Health Blog." Health Blog. 01 Feb. 2013. Web. 03 Feb. 2014.
"Do You Agree or Disagree? Genetically Modified Food (Gmf) Should Be a Good Solution to the World's Increasing Population. Use Specific Reasons and Examples to Support Your Answer." StudyMode. Web. 30 Jan. 2014.
Frazier, Karen. "GMO Statistics." LoveToKnow. Web. 03 Feb. 2014.
"American Radio Works Presents : Engineering Crops in a Needy World : Feature Story."American Radio Works Presents : Engineering Crops in a Needy World : Feature Story. Web. 01 Feb. 2014.
"Genetically Modified Food (GMO) – The Good, The Bad and The Ugly." Carrington. Web. 01 Feb. 2014
"Genetically Modified Foods: Harmful or Helpful?" Genetically Modified Foods: Harmful or Helpful? Web. 28 Jan. 2014.
"GMO's - Pros and Cons - CNN IReport." CNN IReport. Web. 02 Feb. 2014.
Thesis: Television encumbers children from reaching full academic achievements. For adults the outcome is even worse.
ReplyDeletePara. 1: "Students in the top 5% of their class read 144 times more than students in the bottom 5%". (Preddy, 2007). Students who read more than watch TV do exceptionally better in school than those who watch TV or neglect their school work.
Para. 2: Tv causes short attention spans.
“ Every hour added to watching Tv increased a child’s odds of having attention problems by about 10% and kids watching three hours a day 30 % more likely to have attention problems than those viewing no Tv” ( Christakis).
Para. 3: Watching Tv and refusing to exercise can lead to fatal consequences.
"Every additional two hours people spend glued to the tube on a typical day, their risk of developing type 2 diabetes increases by 20% and their risk of heart disease increases by 15%"
Para. 4 (counter- argument): Majority of students watch Tv and/or utilize other mediums, but do just fine in school.
Para 5: Perhaps these students watch less than ten hours of television, but this is not including the other mediums they are using. Also, these students don’t neglect their schoolwork.
“threshold effect resulted that indicates that television viewing does not adversely affect achievement until viewing exceeds about 10 hours per week.”
Outline-
ReplyDeleteArgument: Killing based on love should be legal.
Intro/Thesis- “He kill them wi' their love. Wi' their love fo' each other. That's how it is, every day, all over the world.”-Frank Darabont. Killing based on love should be legal. Of course not everyone who loves someone should go off killing others, but those who have terminally ill loved ones should have a right to assist their loved ones in suicide if monitored properly. This quotes explains how one can kill for the love of”each other”. Many mentally ill/disabled patients would much rather die then to see both themselves and their loved ones suffering because of their illness.
1st paragraph:
- What is euthanasia? {What are their laws? Who does it affectt (and why)?
- Ethos/Logos
- Laws against euthanasia and reasons why
- "To legalize euthanasia would damage important foundational societal values and symbols that uphold respect for human life. With euthanasia, how we die cannot be just a private matter of self-determination and personal beliefs, because euthanasia "is an act that requires two people to make it possible and a complicit society to make it acceptable," [according to D. Callahan in "When Self-Determination Runs Amok"]. The prohibition on intentional killing is the cornerstone of law and human relationships, emphasizing our basic equality."
2nd paragraph:
-logos
- Claim/Argument
- Outcome/problem this is allowing for “murder”
- Evidence/example (Dr. Kavorkian Case)
“helping terminally ill patients end their pain. In 1988, Kevorkian invented what came to be known as a "suicide machine," a device that would allow the patient to pull a switch and release a cocktail of deadly drugs into their system.”
3rd paragraph: (Opponent)
- Restatement of laws agains
-Rebuttal (Patients are suffering not you)
- Logos/Ethos
- {Words from religious views}
“The Sanctity of Life mentality regards individual human life as holy, sacred, and of immeasurable value, regardless of the physical and/or mental quality of the person. You can place a price on things, but not on human persons who are created by God and who are called by God, each one, to union with Him in the unimaginable joy of eternal life in heaven.”
4th paragraph:
-ethos
-examples of countries in which it is legal
“For the citizens of Oregon, the Death with Dignity Act has brought about improvement in many areas and encouraged conversations that many would never have had otherwise. For many, it has brought a small measure of peace of mind, knowing that they can remain in control of their lives if they choose to do so.”
-statistics
-reasons why we should follow
5th paragraph:
- Pathos
-Conclusion
- Solution
- Overall view/sum-up
- "To legalize euthanasia would damage important foundational societal values and symbols that uphold respect for human life. With euthanasia, how we die cannot be just a private matter of self-determination and personal beliefs, because euthanasia "is an act that requires two people to make it possible and a complicit society to make it acceptable," [according to D. Callahan in "When Self-Determination Runs Amok"]. The prohibition on intentional killing is the cornerstone of law and human relationships, emphasizing our basic equality."
DeleteWhere is your rebuttal to this argument?
- Outcome/problem this is allowing for “murder”
Again, where is your rebuttal? Without rebuttals to the opposing argument, you weaken your own argument.
Rebuttal (Patients are suffering not you)
To which opposing argument? You've presented 2.
Outline:
ReplyDeleteThesis: Many factors come into consideration when there is a conflict that is dealt with violence. Factors such as territory, money, power and commonly hidden, religious faith. Can religion, which commonly preaches peace, really be a source of conflict? Some may argue that religion actually prevents war or stops war. Although that may be true to a certain extent, It is not always the case. As seen in the past, many wars or incidents where lives have been lost show some type of religious influence.
Paragraph 1: (Info)
Information on religious beliefs and extremist beliefs.
Wars and genocides influenced by religion
Statistics on wars caused mainly by religion,
Paragraph 2 (pro)
Contradiction between preached peace and violence promoted/justified by religious beliefs
“Last resort” can be interpreted different ways by many people
Extremist believe their actions are a “last resort”
Many deaths have come from religious differences (statistics from crusades and other religion based wars)
Paragraph 3 (Con)
Not all wars caused by religious influence
In the present secular governments exist.
“Just War”
Paragraph 4 (CA)
No government is truly secular
“Just War” is often a “last result” of the KING
Extremist us religion to justify violence to gain political control.
Many factors come into consideration when there is a conflict that is dealt with violence.
DeleteAwkward
Are there any other opposing arguments that you need to address and rebut?
Any counterarguments?
Thesis: There is nothing magical about Disney movies. Disney movies teach certain gender roles about women to children. If children see these gender roles they are going to follow them.
ReplyDeleteP1: Children are influenced a lot by television at a young age. Disney influences a lot of children.
-“It has been demonstrated by psychologists and educators time and again that stories and fairy tales do influence the manner in which children conceive the world..."
-Zipes, Jack. “Breaking the Disney Spell.” From Mouse to Mermaid: The Politics of Film, Gender, and Culture. Ed. Elizabeth Bell, Lynda Haas, Laura Sells. Indianapolis: Indiana University Press, 1995. 21-42.
-Opposing argument: Disney movies are fun stories for children to watch, they are harmless.
-Rebutal: Kids are highly influenced by what they see. Many children want to do exactly what some movie characters want to do. They are not harmless.
P2: Disney teaches that women have to be sexy.
-"Television shows and music videos frequently objectify women, and even Disney movies created for children contain sexy heroines."
-AboutKidsHealth. "The Sexualization of Girls Is Harmful." Is Childhood Becoming Too Sexualized. Olivia Ferguson and Hayley Mitchell Haugen. Detroit: Greenhaven Press, 2010. At Issue. Rpt. from "Sexy Babies: How Sexualization Hurts Girls." 2007. Opposing Viewpoints in Context. Web. 28 Jan. 2014.
-Disney movies portray women with 'sexy' figures. Jessica Rabbit is a perfect example for this. She wears a really tight provocative dress, that flaunts her enormously exaggerated cleavage and hips.
-It is okay for women to wear whatever they want, but Disney dramatically sexualizes women. If women are not 'sexy' or pretty they don't have happy endings. Children are taught that they must be beautiful and flaunt their bodies to achieve their happiness.
P3: Disney teaches girls that they need to be rescued by a man.
-"A few years ago, Mary Finucane started noticing changes in the way her 3-year-old daughter played. The toddler had stopped running and jumping, and insisted on wearing only dresses. She sat on the front step quietly - waiting, she said, for her prince."
- Hanes, Stephanie. "Little girls or little women? The Disney princess effect." Christian Science Monitor 24 Sept. 2011. Opposing Viewpoints in Context. Web. 29 Jan. 2014.
-Many little girls believe that they need to be rescued by their 'prince'. Many Disney movies portray that women are weak and can not be independent and happy without being married. This is very wrong for girls at such a young age to believe.
-Getting married isn't wrong at all, but many girls fall into the 'damsel in distress' mode where they don't do anything with their lives because they are waiting for a man with money to make them happy. Disney portrays women to be good at one thing only, house-work.
Conclusion:
-Tie in everything together
-Call for action
-Restatement of thesis
Disney movies teach certain gender roles about women to children.
DeleteThis is unclear. Restate.
Good supporting arguments, but where are the opposing arguments and rebuttals?
Outline
ReplyDeleteIntro: Thesis
The pay for a professional athlete should not be higher than the pay of a servicemen.
P1: Background
General comparison of salary gap between athletes and servicemen. Comparison will show the ridiculous amount athletes get paid compared to servicemen.
P2: Reasons for …
Reasons why servicemen should be paid more. For example, an athlete’s only risk can be a sprained ankle while a servicemen can lose his life. Another reason is that servicemen sacrifice more than athletes. Servicemen must leave their families and be on duty/base while athletes can go home to their families.
P3: Counter-arguments
Possible arguments against can be that athletes posses rare skills that not everyone has. Another argument against can be that they contribute to the economy by bringing in revenue and giving more jobs (vendors, coaches, managers, workers in stadiu, etc). An increase in pay could result to a promotion of war.
Intro: Thesis
DeleteThe pay for a professional athlete should not be higher than the pay of a servicemen.
You need some kind of opener.
For example, an athlete’s only risk can be a sprained ankle while a servicemen can lose his life
Incorrect, depending on the sport, athletes are at risk of concussions even death.
You need more reasons. What you have now seems very weak.
Any opposing arguments? Rebuttals?
Hook: “When I spoke here last winter, this nation was facing the worst economic crisis since the Great Depression. We were losing an average of 700,000 jobs per month. Credit was frozen. And our financial system was on the verge of collapse (Obama).” Barrack Obama said this during his speech of Health care. Which I found sort of ironic since his health care plan caused a government shutdown.
ReplyDeleteIntro: Obama health care also known as the (Affordable Care Act) a law that has the quality, availability and affordability of private and public health insurance to 44 million uninsured. The law also works to curb the growth in healthcare spending in the US which has been rising at an unsustainable rate.
Thesis: Therefore, Obama health care should not pass because it will cause a decrease in job and job salary. Further on it would cause a burden to those people who do not need it and are now forced to buy it. However those who will be mostly affected by this law would be the elderly people because they will be facing higher Medicare cost. Many elderly people will experience a reduction in their Medicare Advantage benefit or even lose their existing plan.
Paragraph 1:
Sub claim: It will cause a decrease in job. Many owners will be force to lay off worker in order to not pay their insurance health.
Opposing Argument: Obama argues that yes, it has caused a decrease in job, however it will benefit the country in the long term. Beside American people deserve to get a better system in health care.
Paragraph2:
Sub claims: Many people are going to be forced to buy health insurance, even those who do not want it or need it. It is going to caused a burden on the middle and low class who are now are forced to buy the health care insurance.
Opposing Argument: The opposing might argue that Obama Care offers “subsidies to low and middle income Americans to aid them in obtaining affordable quality health insurance and also does things like expand Medicaid to almost 20 million more Americans”.
Rebuttals: However it can still be expensive to family who has 5 members in it.
Paragraph 3:
Sub claims: Elderly people are going to be affected by this because there going to have to pay for there insurance.
Opposing Argument: Everyone is required to pay some might pay more than others.
Conclusion: Overall conclusion, call for action, and restatement of thesis.
Therefore, Obama health care should not pass because it will cause a decrease in job and job salary.
DeleteWhat do you mean, therefore, you have not presented any information to suggest or indicate that obamacare will cause a decrease in job and job salary. You jumped from arguments that obamacare in a good light to this statement against it, which makes your statement vary weak.
Obama argues that yes, it has caused a decrease in job, however it will benefit the country in the long term. Beside American people deserve to get a better system in health care.
Make sure you say what ways he thinks it will benefit America in the long run AND MAKE SURE YOU HAVE AN APPROPRIATE REBUTTAL TO THAT ARGUMENT.
where are your other rebuttals and counterarguments?
Paragraph 1: What’s female and male circumcision? Where did it start?
ReplyDeleteThesis: Governments shall not ban female and male circumcision in Islamic nations because it helps carry on cultural heritage. Westerners argue that circumcision is immoral and a cruel practice. Therefore, Americans are more likely to oppose circumcision to protect individual rights and prevent health risks caused by circumcisions. However, in the eyes of those living in traditional Islamic villages in Africa or in other Islamic nations, circumcision is a religious and cultural necessity.
Paragraph 3: Explain why Islamic communities practice male and female circumcision.
-Community, family, and male pressure
-What is believed circumcision can prevent for males and women. (Aids/HIV, STD’s, infections, & premarital sex).
Paragraph 4: Explain the viewpoint of Westerners (specifically Americans) on male and female circumcision
-Unsanitary Tools Used which lead to infections
-Procedure not done by professional
-No anesthesia = cruel and painful
-Amount of fatalities
-Effects on birth
-Problem within society (Cruel Practice)
-Breaking the law because it has been banned in many countries already
-Female Circumcision & Patriarchy
Paragraph 5: Explain why Americans should understand this cultural practice
-Males and females express their fears, but then later are proud of getting circumcised.
-Allows woman and males to be respected in society (Ceremonies)
-The relevance of this quote to my claim is that foreigners and nontraditional government officials need to allow circumcisions in Islamic nations. Permitting circumcisions will allow for females and males to be circumcised safely with the adequate tools necessary to prevent fatalities or infections.
Paragraph 6: A cultural practice that the US follows that other countries would disagree with.
-Possible solutions for the US if this were practiced (decrease HIV/AIDS)
Paragraph 7: Restatement of thesis
-Restate Solution
- So what?
-What is believed circumcision can prevent for males and women. (Aids/HIV, STD’s, infections, & premarital sex).
DeleteWhere did this information come from? Is there data to back this up? And, what of the post-circumcision illnesses, infections, and complications that sometimes lead to death.
Outline:
ReplyDeleteThesis: Mental illness contributes to creativity.
Par 1: Basics/brief background
-Definition of a mental illness
-Cause and effects of mental illness
-What does creativity have to do with it?
Par 2: Subclaim: Evolution
-Brief history of mental illness (How long it's been around)
-Articles, theories, and statistics
-Scientific evidence
Par 3: Artists
-Statistics on artists and mental illness
-Mentall illness in the creative profession v non creative profession
Par 4: Counter: The connection between mental illness and creativity is romanticised.
-Stigma of mental illness
-Stigma of being creative
-Compare to other mental illness connections
Par 4: Counter: The connection between mental illness and creativity is romanticised.
Delete-Stigma of mental illness
-Stigma of being creative
-Compare to other mental illness connections
How is there only 1 counterargument the entire essay? Where the the opposing views and the rebuttals. Opposing arguments should be presented earlier in the essay.
Outline
ReplyDeleteIntro: Thesis
Animal/ pet breeding should be in a limited state, enforced by the government.
P #1: Background
- Why and how animal breeding is done. Difference between a animal breeding controlled state and one that is not. What happens/ complications come with breeding and irresponsible pet owners.
P #2: Diseases presented in breeding animals
- how mutations/ diseases can be caused due to humans breeding carelessly
- examples on specific breeds with genetic mutations
P #3:
Counter arguments:
- Breeding animals can be a good thing for people who want pet companions.
- Many people want aesthetically specific breeds of animals that may be hard to find.
- There are animal shelters for animals who do not have homes due to abandonment.
Intro: Thesis
DeleteAnimal/ pet breeding should be in a limited state, enforced by the government
Why jump to this argument? Why not just argue for enforcement of such laws in every state.
Where are your rebuttals, counterarguments, and sources
Outline:
ReplyDeleteArgument:
Same sex couples should all have the opportunity to have children and are capable of raising a child.
Paragraph 1:
Children will live in homes with loving families
Logos/Ethos
-Instead of living in a foster home
-Gays are more likely to adopt children over the age of six compared to straight couples, because of no reason to hide the fact that the child is adopted
Paragraph 2:
Children raised by a same sex couple turn out with the same behaviors as a child raised by a straight couple
Logos/Ethos
-Address having a feminine and masculine influence when raising a child
-Counter argument: children will also become homosexual because they are raised by a same sex couple
-Address preconceived notions of gays molesting their children.
Paragraph 3:
Complications with adoption/ parental rights
Logos/Ethos
-Some states do not recognize same sex couples with a child as a rightful parent or guardians which results in complications with hospitals
Paragraph 4:
Surrogacy/ insemination
Logos/Pathos
-This will benefit one parent being a father to the baby
-Although the other spouse will still have to go through legal complications to become a rightful parent.
-Same sex couples are discriminated and are denied surrogacy.
Paragraph 5:
It is a human right to be able to start a family when they are suitable for the task.
Pathos/Ethos
-The biological struggle that same sex couples are faced with discern them from conceiving a child but they should be able to have and care for a child of their own as they seem fit. Many people desire to start a family, it is an instinct and denying this for a person because of his or her sexual orientation is inhumane.
-Include a story of woman who have been successful surrogates.
because of no reason to hide the fact that the child is adopted
DeleteWhat does this have to do with adopting older children as opposed to babies? Are you implying that people adopt babies so that when the child gets older they do not know they're adopted?
-Address having a feminine and masculine influence when raising a child
-Counter argument: children will also become homosexual because they are raised by a same sex couple
This is not a counter to that argument; that argument does not simply say that the child will grow up gay because he/she is raised by gay parents; this arguments takes the logical stance that children need the influence of both male and female parents. You should present the data or expert opinion for this argument, because it is valid and it addresses audience concerns.
Concede to the argument, but counter with the % of children growing up in single family homes who turn out to be health and responsible human being. Do research to support your counter.
Many people desire to start a family, it is an instinct and denying this for a person because of his or her sexual orientation is inhumane.
This is a bit dramatic. There is a problem with this that you can address, but it's not inhumane.
Also, some can argue that same sex adults make the conscious choice to marry someone of the same sex with whom they cannot reproduce and while it's unconstitutional to deny them that choice, they must own the consequence of that choice.
Outline
ReplyDeleteIntro: Thesis
who is correct ?
P #1: Background
- what natural selection evolution and intelligent design are
P #2: the overall subject and controversy of intelligent design
-religions views
-scientist views
P #3:
Put it all together in one paragraph scientist views and beliefs as well as religions views and beliefs and bring in evidence (logos) for both views.
P#4 my opinion in comparison to these views using evidence that comes from or stems from those used in previous paragraphs.
I cannot tell what said you are arguing for. Also, where are your rebuttals and counterargument. I also requested that your sources be present in your outline.
ReplyDeleteThis outline demonstrates a gross lack of effort.
Argument: The media and societal expectations have come to perpetuate this idea of an deal male that is harmful to boys and young men.
ReplyDeleteIntro:
Definition of masculinity. Anecdotes or quotes of how boys are told to behave/act.
Paragraph 1:
Begin talking about the hyper-masculine mindset boys are likely to develop as a result of these expectations.
Logos/Pathos
Paragraph 2:
Elaborate on the idea that boys and men are not supposed to expressed their emotions.
Ethos/Logos
-stats on males with addiction problems, males in prisons, males that are homeless.
-go into male suicide rates (men are three times more likely to commit suicide)
Paragraph 2:
Further elaborate on the male stereotype by talking about male violence and reckless behavior.
Logos/Ethos
- violence seen in male-directed movies.
- men having to fight when their masculinity is threatened.
- expert opinions, psychology behind this violence
Paragraph 3:
Male attitudes towards woman. Men have to be womanizers. Superior to them.
Logos/Ethos
- Movies young men see (James Bond, Batman, etc) that portray successful men surrounded by woman.
- domestic violence statistics (ties back to violence and inability to show emotion).
- effects and stories about men and woman.
Paragraph 4:
Talking about the way males also develop body image problems.
Logos/Pathos
- talk about how in the older days fat men were successful and how it has developed to become thin, fit, and muscular men that are successful.
- Calvin Klein, Ambercombie & Fitch, etc. models (same effect as Victoria Secret models).
- Expert opinions or anecdotes about boys and young men.
*I need to include a counter argument for my topic. Further research will allow me to find one and counter it*
Thesis: Affirmative action based merely on race is a flawed practice.
ReplyDeleteIntroduction: Explain what affirmative action is.
P#1: Affirmative action perpetuates racism.
• Proponents of affirmative action state that affirmative action “levels the field” for minority students who generally have to face disadvantages to succeed academically.
o You cannot reward minorities, while putting others such as Whites in disadvantage. That is discrimination. By only rewarding minorities, a group of low-income whites is excluded (this group might also face difficulties succeeding academically).
P#2: Affirmative action has not benefited the intended group.
• Affirmative action was created to benefit the descendants of slaves and of minorities who had faced discrimination prior to the Civil Right movement. However, native Africans (not African-Americans) have been one of the most benefited groups due to affirmative action.
• Middle-class minorities have benefited more than poor Americans. Middle-class minorities may not have faced challenges to succeed academically, but are given preference to colleges because of their race
P#3: Race should not be the determining factor to college admittances.
• It’s understandable that colleges want to increase diversity. However, race is not an accurate indicative of ethnic diversity. For instance, just because a person identifies himself as being of an ethnic origin, that does not mean he feels a connection to his culture.
• Diversity can be more than racial.
Conclusion:
• Restate points
• Last rebuttal
• So what?
"11 Facts About Affirmative Action." Do Something. N.p., n.d. Web. 03 Feb. 2014.
"The Case Against Affirmative Action." Stanford Magazine. N.p., n.d. Web. 03 Feb. 2014.
Outline:
ReplyDeleteIntro:
-Hook *pondering*
-Background...including: the history of school lunches (how it’s been provided) and vending machine products
-Thesis: Schools should only provide their students with nutritious foods.
Body 1: According to an online poll at About.com, more than 40 percent of American parents state that their children do not eat breakfast on a regular basis. School lunches, then, are an even more essential component in the diets of most students. In fact, American students consume an estimated 20 to 50 percent of their total daily calories while at school.
- Since American students consume 20 to 50 percent of their daily calories while at school, they should be provided with nutritious food.
Body 2: “Obesity rates among adolescents whose parents have no more than a high school education rose from about 20% to 25%...parents with a four year degree or more saw their obesity rates decline from 14% to 7%” (Los Angeles Times).
- This shows the correlation between parents’ educational background and their children’s health. Thus, by schools only distributing nutritious foods, children who attend low income schools will also have lower obesity rates.
Body 3: The American Beverage Association trade group said the industry already was changing the type of products available in schools to reduce calories and portion size, and had agreed to voluntary guidelines on items sold in schools.
- Although The American Beverage Association trade group said that they were already switching the products available, it seems to be ineffective because obesity rates are still rising.
Body 4: Counter Argument- Critics may argue that making processed foods saves money, however that is not true, because the students parent will then have to spend a lot of money in hospital bills.
Rebuttal- “$1 billion of “surplus” fruits, vegetables, and meats that the USDA supplies to the [lunch] program...[are being] turned them into high-fat processed foods” (Grist).
Body 5: Maintaining the presence of fast food, soft drink, and junk food companies in public schools sends all the wrong messages to children. These companies are eager to sell their products in schools because they want to get kids hooked at an early age, to ensure brand loyalty for life.
- If only nutritious foods were distributed to children, they wouldn’t have access to junk food, which therefore would decrease obesity and increase healthy lifestyles.
Conclusion
-The “So What”
-Call for Action
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