Dear Students,
It is now time to post your rough drafts. You have already posted one of your draft. In reading a few, I noticed that a number of you have essays that read more like a research post of some other note form rather than an essay. I expect a complete essay (introduction, body, and conclusion) executed as if this were your final draft. Please refer to the handout in your packet on constructing an argument essay; also, see your sample essay packet for examples of the expectations.
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Music may establish certain negative effects to human nature as well as positive effects that overpower adverse feelings. The brain is able to be neurologically altered through the use of music. Reactions such as happiness are able to be created through joyful music. These type of reactions are able to be created through different music genres. The increasing empowerment pertaining to music emphasizes on the daily aspects of an individual, hence music should be represented into the culture as a positive
ReplyDeleteThe influencing impact that music portrays to the human body, makes it able to alter different connections that assist the development in which a being processes things regularly. One example of this is how music has been able to help improve neurological functions in certain people. Summa Chadwick, Martha, in her article, "The power of music: the use of music protocols to enhance neurological function," informs about a boy named Jimmy Miller; who at a young age was diagnosed with pervasive developmental disorder (PDD). Pervasive developmental disorder is referred to as a mild form of autism, which causes problems with communicating and interacting with others. Miller underwent a series of therapies to counter certain aspects of his disorder and one of the treatments consisted of the use of music. The type of treatment used is known as rhythmic entrainment, “defined as techniques which utilize the therapeutic application of music to cognitive, sensory, and motor dysfunction due to neurological disorder or disease,” (Chadwick). There was an increase in motor skills in Jimmy by using music as a therapy. According to ASAPScience, music causes a neurotransmitter in the brain called dopamine to be released. Dopamine is said to be, “a chemical responsible for making you ‘feel good’.” With dopamine present, pleasure is created. Furthermore, the video states that music causes arousal that causes dilated pupils and increased blood pressure. Dopamine chemically alters our body and because of this music can become addicting. In another ASAPScience video, it was informed that music can improve athletic performance. One way this is done is through synchronous music said to “coincide with repetitive movements that sports have.” Music can narrow an athlete’s focus. Music does not just work only for athletes. People in search of a good workout use music in order to get their heart pumping, this allows them to have a more efficient workout.
In looking at several genres of music, one can see that music can have a variety of benefits. It is said that classical music helps people concentrate; this is known as the Mozart Effect. Classical music like, “Mozart, Brahms, and Bach--shifts the brain's activity from beta to the higher awareness alpha waves,” and “this type of music lowers stress and increases concentration,”(Meyer, Roger H.). Classical music can help people concentrate. However, one thing is not guaranteed to work for everyone else. The article mentions that “being exposed to music you dislike, causes negative effects, including higher blood pressure and stress.” This goes to show that music does not just have benefits, but some negatives as well. Music depending on the type can make people do certain things, such as relax, sleep, move faster and other things. Listening to rock music can allow for: motivation, mood regulation, stimulation, and identification. “Teens find hope and encouragement when they listen to music talking about problems they are going through,” (Susan McCammon). For mood regulation, McCammon claims, “Positive rock music provides depressed teens with a means to forget their problems and engage in healthy activities such as dancing.” For stimulation, she informs “the strong and fast beats of rock music energize teens and make them livelier.” All these behaviors were caused due to music, and this shows how for several people are able to benefit from musc. The article says that “listening to rock music helps adolescents gain access to peer groups whose members prefer the same kind of music.” All this information shows the benefits of the rock genre.
DeleteAlthough music has its advantages, music also has possible downsides, such as potential deafness. According to Wolfgang von Goethe, Johann “The cochlea or auditory portion of the inner ear, has 16,000 hair cells.” The brain from the activated hair cells can interpret loudness. Wolfgang states that, “Prolonged and repeated exposure above 85 decibels produces hearing loss.” Google defines a decibel as, “a unit used to measure the intensity of a sound or the power level of an electrical signal by comparing it with a given level on a logarithmic scale.” The article says that a regular conversation is 60 decibels, a busy street is 80 decibels, and a concert is 140 decibels. In a research presented in “Radio & Music,” it was found, “noise levels above 110 decibels strip[s] insulation from nerve fibers carrying signals from the ear to the brain. Loss of the protective coating, called myelin' disrupts electrical nerve signals.” The nerves that are damaged due to loud music are what cause people to go deaf. Although listening to music can cause potential deafness, it is under the responsibility of an individual to not exceed the volume limit that some devices advise. It is often said that certain genres of music are what cause violence in society. Genres such as Heavy Metal and Hip-Hop are two that are critiqued this way many times. Sebasstien Elkouby who has worked several years with teens in school, and juvenile detention centers, states that “mainstream rap music can’t be blamed for all of today’s social ills as unemployment, poverty, gangs, drugs, failing school system, and institutionalized racism are the real culprits,” he goes on to say, “However, mainstream rap’s impact on youth cannot be ignored and has undoubtedly contributed to an already troubled society.” In the article, "Hip-Hop and Rap Lyrics Can Be Useful Teaching Tools.” by Flannery, Mary Ellen. Ellen talks about a teacher who was able to use hip hop as a learning tool. This teacher received some of the highest scores. “For him, the lyrics—scrubbed of all profanity, misogyny, homophobia, or other offense—offer a valid source of imagery, alliteration, personification, or other literary devices. Often he'll pair a hip-hop artist with a classic poet to teach a specific standard,” (Ellen).
Music has been around for centuries, and it has been able to help people in many ways. The way that music alters our bodies contributes to improving functions in the brain, and for certain moods to be activated. Several genres have different benefits that can several people. One can see how music can outweigh the negatives that music holds. Due to all this music should be a part of everyone’s life.
DeleteHi there Ricardo. I like how you were the first one to post your essay.
DeleteAfter reading your essay, I am just going to place sentences that I found a bit awkward. This is the first line of your second paragraph, were you say "The influencing impact that music portrays to the human body, makes it able to alter different connections that assist the development in which a being processes things regularly." I have an idea what you are saying, it is just that it is worded kind of weird.
I like how you use different citing methods as well. Also, I like how you slightly summarize your evidence too. But I think that you can go into more into depth with analysis. For example, in the second paragraph you said "Dopamine is said to be, “a chemical responsible for making you ‘feel good’. With dopamine present, pleasure is created. Furthermore, the video states that music causes arousal that causes dilated pupils and increased blood pressure."
With this, I think you can give a situation to bolster this. For example, you can give a common situation of a person having a "horrible day" and that they feel negative. You can then state that music can probably lighten the mood of that person.
I also like to highlight how well you addressed that music has negative effects too. However, one thing is not guaranteed to work for everyone else. "The article mentions that “being exposed to music you dislike, causes negative effects, including higher blood pressure and stress.” This goes to show that music does not just have benefits, but some negatives as well."
Even though you mentioned the negative effects of listening to music such as deafness, and agitation from music genres one does not like, it was kind of confusing. It seemed that you focused a lot more on that rather than your argument. I feel that you should focus more on the positive effects since that is your main argument.
Overall, good work Ricardo. I really like your essay so far and I think you will do well, you just need to do a little more work on it.
Jose thank you for the big amount of feedback. I will add what you have told me and try to make things sound more clearly.
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When individuals think of the word terrorism, the first thing that comes to mind for some individuals are notorious terrorist organizations such as Al-Qaeda and the Islamic State(ISIS). With recent media attention on ISIS, it is plausible that many individuals only think of terrorists as Muslim extremists who are willing to go to war with the U.S solely based on their ideals. According to Oxford’s definition, terrorism is “the use of violence and intimidation in the pursuit of political aims.” This definition can possibly cause many individuals to confuse and act of revolution with an act of terrorism. Although Al-Qaeda and ISIS are terrorist groups, they are not the only ones.
In France during the late eighteenth century, the country was going through depression due to war debt. At the time there was a laissez-faire government full of aristocrats that did nothing to do assist those who were impacted the most by the depression. As a result, the wealthy ended up becoming wealthier, while the poor got poorer. When the revolution started in 1789-1799, the word terrorism was first used to describe the Reign of Terror, and was “originally referred specifically to state terrorism as practiced by the French government during the 1793–1794 Reign of terror.” Although terrorism” originally referred to acts committed by a government” it is currently used to “refer to the killing of innocent people for political purposes” by the media. (Wikipedia) It is possible, that due to the current definition terrorism many are confusing a revolution with an act of terror. A revolution by definition is a “forcible overthrow of a government or social order in favor of a new system.” (Dictionary) If the definition were to change, there would probably be less confusion between terrorists and revolutionists There is a n unclear line of what separates a terrorist and a revolutionist since both have a political goal.
There is the argument of innocent people getting killed, however; innocent people might get killed in the process of a revolution which might spark outrage and lead media to define the act as terrorism. That is why the definition of terrorism should be changed to, a sub-state that has an extreme belief that is either political,religious or philosophical and resorts to aggressive violence and killings of innocent people to enforce their beliefs onto citizens. Likewise, revolutions should be redefined to, an act of overthrowing a government that is not fulfilling its duties in order to better society for the people.
ReplyDeleteSince the tragedy of the 9/11 attack, the U.S has placed more interest in stopping organizations that they label as terrorists. The U.S mainly goes after Middle Eastern, Islamic extremists. This can be seen though the US attempt in stopping Al-Qaeda and ISIS. As a result of the 9/11 attack, came a xenophobia against the Muslim community. This can be seen with the revampization of airport security, and the prejudice some people have towards Muslims; assuming that they are all terrorists. In addition, the United States only calls organizations terrorists if they threatened to attack them. For example, Al-Qaeda and ISIS which are the most common ones. There are other terrorist groups that fall under the new definition that I stated. We tend to associate terrorism with groups such as Al-Qaeda rather than groups such as Earth First!
Earth first is a radical environmentalist advocacy group that wants to preserve the "Ecosystem". This group is responsible for sabotaging nuclear plants and one bombing and yet they have not been labeled as terrorists. This group has an extreme viewpoint on a belief that the environment should be preserved. This group tends to resort to violence in order to achieve or make that belief happen. And yet, one is a terrorist while the other is seen as a radical organization because the U.S was only impacted by one specific one. If Earth first! were to attack the United States, it is plausible that it would not receive as much media attention when compared to the 9/11 attack. However, since both are considered terrorists then why should we only focus more attention on one? Are not both of them dangerous and can inflict harm in order to make their extreme beliefs become reality?
Middle-Eastern, Muslim extremist groups are the face of terrorism. Yet, many do not know the motives of those terrorist groups and believe that ISIS and Al-Qaeda are both the same since they are Muslim. If they are Muslim, then that means that their motives must be exactly the same right? According to a Wikipedia page on the origin of ISIS, ISIS and Al-Qaeda used to be together. It was up until recently the two groups separated. The two terrorist groups have completely different motives however, even though they seem to be parallel. Al-Qaeda is against what the United States' actions in foreign affairs and sees them as infidels. But with ISIS, it is different. ISIS want to proclaim themselves as the caliphate. This means that they want to be the supreme ruler of all Muslims and that they proclaim to be the successors of Muhammad. Another one of their motives is to humiliate the United States by killing their soldiers and hand their flag in the United States and commit actions against humanity by slaughtering US soldiers and their families. As a result of ISIS’ violent and carnage, many individuals who have no knowledge of the terrorist group and the religion that they believe in end up thinking that all individuals who look and have the same religion are the same. The religion of Islam does not promote violence, it promotes peace, justice, and equality; not bloodshed.
ReplyDeleteMany might argue with the idea that the motives of terrorists do not make them different since they are in the end terrorists. Yes, that is true. However; knowing the motives of terrorists groups and the reasons for their birth can possibly help prevent others that might be parallel from being created. This can be seen with the creation of the Taliban or also known as Al-Qaeda. the leader of the group, “Bin Laden and al Qaeda violently opposed the United States for several reasons.” On of the first reasons why the terrorist group strongly opposed the united states was due to the fact that they saw the US as an ‘infidel" because it was not governed in a manner consistent with the group's extremist interpretation of Islam.” The second reasons why the terrorist group opposed the US had to do with the fact that Al-Qaeda saw the US “providing essential support for other "infidel" governments and institutions, particularly the governments of Saudi Arabia and Egypt, the nation of Israel, and the United Nations organization,” There are other various reasons on why Al-Qaeda opposes the terrorist group, but the main outcome was “Bin Laden declar[ing] a jihad, or holy war, against the United States, which he has carried out through al Qaeda and its affiliated organizations.”(PBS) In addition to this, what many do not know that the United States trained and armed Al-Qaeda during the Cold war in order to fight of the Soviet Union from obtaining countries in the Middle-East. It is possible that terrorist groups can be stopped, not only Al-Qaeda and ISIS, if their origins are presented to the public in a professional manner.
ReplyDeleteIn Conclusion, the topic of terrorism should be handled in and addressed in a way that gives the common people an insight to what it is and when to note what is truly an act of terrorism. That is why it should be given a new definition because media and individuals tend to confuse it with a revolution in a corrupt country, due to the vague definition given by the Oxford dictionary. Terrorist groups should also be explained as well, not only the notorious ones that media covers constantly, but others none might have heard of such as Earth First! In addition, the negative effects of covering traditional middle-eastern, islamic terrorist should be addressed also.
“ ‘Colorism’ is the discriminatory treatment of individuals falling within the same ‘racial’ group on the basis of skin color.” The presence of colorism is found across many cultures, fostering prejudices and undermining self esteem. However, it’s effects are most commonly seen in women.
ReplyDeleteOften colorism is generalized as simply racism. However, there is one major factor that distinguishes the two and that is the level of consciousness people have while committing the acts. With racial discrimination, the entire race is targeted for being anything other than white. There’s an intent behind this discrimination, as racist people believe in the superiority of white people in comparison to people of color. On the other hand, with colorism, certain members of a group are distinguished from others and held to a higher standard based on beauty ideals that have root in slavery and oppression, most often subconsciously.
Colorism originated during slavery when labor was divided based on skin tone. Those with darker skin tones were subjected to field work, while those of lighter shades were assigned to work in the homes of slave masters, which the slaves perceived as a more privileged position. “Slaveowners usually preferred light-skinned enslaved Africans for house work assignments because the light-skinned enslaved Africans looked more like the slaveowner than dark-skinned enslaved Africans who were perceived as more threatening(Grace Williams).” Here, the notion that lighter skin gives one an advantage over others of their race developed, since the lighter one’s skin was, the closer they were to whiteness. What also resulted was that beauty standards were created according to white or western ideals.
In effect, in today’s society people of color with “ethnic” features or darker skin tones face discrimination on the basis of stereotypes and internalized prejudices. The University of Maryland found that “numerous empirical social science studies establish the existence of unconscious or automatic negative stereotype bias toward groups on the basis of race, age, or gender and demonstrate that these unintentional biases influence decision making(Taunya Banks).” That is decision making related to job hiring and the judicial system. Patterns in recent history show that people of color with light skin complexions are likely to have a better job outlook, higher incomes, and to receive a better education(Keith and Herring).
There are two types of colorism, intraracial and interracial. The type detailed so far has been interracial colorism, which is when people from a racial group make distinctions based on color towards people of another racial group, more similar to racism in that one race is judging another. Intraracial colorism is when members of a racial group make distinctions within their own race. This is type of colorism is most common since colorism is predominantly an issue within racial communities. Western beauty ideals have become a social norm to the point that people of color live by them and create hierarchies within their communities based on them.
Most racial communities have adopted colorism ideologies. Some have developed more directly as a product of slavery and colonization whereas other races have been exposed due to migration and trade. “Having been spread as part of the ideological rationale for slavery and colonial imperialism of the European powers (Keith, 2009, p.27), the “white is better” or “white is right” idea still pervades modern societies.” In addition to African and Latin American communities, Asian communities are also largely impacted by colorism. In fact, the beauty markets in those countries cater to colorism and changing facial characteristics more so than any other culture. They provide a clear example of the effects intraracial colorism in action. In a fairly recent study it was estimated that, “In the Asia Pacific region, the skin lightening market was valued at over US$13 billion in 2012 (Tan, 2012),” not including the other sectors of their beauty industry.
DeleteAnother example can be found in the social class structure of India. In V.S Naipaul’s novel Half a Life, although fictional, he illustrates how the Indian community values colorism. “When protagonist Willie Chandron’s father decided to rebel against his Brahmin family, the most extreme form of protest he could make was to marry a dark-skinned woman of lower caste...His bride’s low caste and dark skin were associated in his mind with coarse features, poverty, lack of education, primitiveness, uncleanness, even ritual impurity(Rondilla and Pickard).” On the other hand, lighter skin was associated with higher castes, which shows the adaptation of Western ideals. Therefore, colorism is an issue that pervades many cultures.
Across all cultures, colorism has a greater impact on women, which may be due to the fact that women are constantly pressures, more so than men, to live up to societal expectations of beauty.
In an essay examining colorism issues, it addresses the fact that women are made to feel that they need to gain the acceptance of others, mainly when it comes to their appearance(Rondilla and Spickard). “Some men feel similar pressures, though not so often and seldom with as much force; for in nearly all human societies beauty is more rigorously required of women than of men. Men can feel good about themselves on the basis of power, wealth, and achievement(Rondilla and Spickard).” This further reinforces the logic of why the cosmetics industry is so profitable. It takes advantage of colorism and promotes the White beauty standard. “The cosmetics industry works to constantly and persistently reinforce the ideal into the mindset of people, making it into an accepted social norm. Commercials by cosmetic firms continuously remind the consumers of what they should look like, and thus eventually what they should consume in order to achieve the said goals(Chung).” This is not to say that men are not affected by colorism at all. But men are generally effected in the career industry, with darker men being racially profiled and stereotyped, whereas women face much criticism and judgement in all areas of their lives.
The reason why colorism is still a major issue is because it is often overlooked for racial discrimination. It is hard to prove that it is taking place and make those doing it acknowledge it because, although they are placing certain members of a group on a higher regard, they are not actually discriminating against the race itself. So again, the act goes unnoticed and whether or not there is intent is indistinguishable. Colorism also causes tension within racial communities. In an article interviewing Bill Duke, the director of both documentaries Light Girls and Dark Girls, when asked why he thinks the issue divides communities he said,“The thing is one group thinks it’s going through more pain than the other.” The lighter group is not always privileged due to colorism; it is harmful for both groups. Having lighter skin is a disadvantage when it comes to “ethnic identity and integration into ethnic groups(Hunter).” In an essay by Mills College sociology department, it notes how lightness can at times be a disadvantage by relating it to the 2008 presidential election. Politicians Obama and Richardson were negatively affected by being “too light” when it came to gaining the trust and support of their racial communities. “Richardson must simultaneously remind people that he is Latino, and downplay his Latino identity in order to navigate the dangerous waters of race, immigration, and assimilation.(Hunter)” This is the contradiction of colorism. It is a double-edged sword to people of lighter skin tones who are supposed to be advantaged by it in society, yet they are disadvantaged in their own communities.
DeleteIn conclusion, colorism is not to be interchanged with racial discrimination since either members of one race treat select members of another unequal or members of the race itself create a hierarchy within their own communities. It has presence in many cultures and racial communities and no one side of a group is entirely advantaged. The only way for it to be resolved is for all races to recognize and acknowledge it.
The word discrimination can mean so many things to so many people, but there is but one accurate definition. Discrimination is “the difference of treatment between members of different groups when one group is intentionally singled out and treated worse, or not given the same opportunities.” This means that discrimination is something that can happen to anybody, regardless of the language they speak, what their race is, or what gender they are. I was able to find a unique article that spoke of how Caucasian teenagers were enraged at the fact that they were being discriminated against because of “the discrimination against whites and others in university admissions”. I found this to be a very interesting topic that reminds me to look at the multiple aspects of discrimination and not only focus on the discrimination against minorities, but the large discrimination against all types of people.
ReplyDeleteDiscrimination has been promoted throughout the media as long as the media itself has existed. If you turn on the T.V. then within as short as a 5 minute I am sure you will see some form of stereotype of gender roles or a stereotype of race. These are the most common types of discrimination that is widespread without our knowledge and it usually leads to some type of misconception. The news, for example, has revealed a lot of information that has been left to be deciphered by their audience and that can lead to misinterpretation, which can lead to prejudice towards people or things that we have not yet been exposed to. I believe that the media is responsible for promoting news that is stereotypical and when doing so I feel like they should be more cautious. When a news channel reports that there has been a robbery committed by an African-American, they should proceed to tell the audience the percentage behind robberies committed by African-Americans
Yellow journalism is defined as “journalism that is based upon sensationalism and crude exaggeration.” That type of journalism is usually not factual, and their goal is to make money by selling information that is partially true.According to an article I read called “RACISM AND THE AMERICAN MEDIA” by Patrick Henningsen, it is shown that the media tends to alter the truth and only play parts of a message or parts of a picture to send a false message to its audience for the improvement of its ratings. An example of the media’s reporting leading to trouble would be Fox 11’s coverage on an event in Paris.
“The city of Paris plans to sue Fox News over what it described as derisive on-air
comments, a spokesperson confirmed to CBS News.
They plan to sue for damage to “the honor and image of Paris,” the spokesperson told CBS News’ Elaine Cobbe.
Paris mayor Anne Hidalgo first announced the decision on CNN.
Fox News has come under attack in France recently for its portrayal of life in Paris’ Muslim neighborhoods in the wake of the Charlie Hebdo attacks. According to the New York Times, the network has aired segments proclaiming parts of the French capital “no-go zones” for non-Muslims, which the police avoid.”
This is an event of which the news station has made a false accusation based on the limited information they were able to gather, and with time I am sure that this may become the everyday story of communities that feel misrepresented through the media’s release of controversial news.
People are generally influenced by discrimination without their knowledge. Those who are not properly educated tend to learn from the media and that leads to there being a generalization of the different types of people that they are yet to meet. The news tends to reveal a lot of information that is unfortunately left to be deciphered by their audience and that can sometimes lead to misinterpretation. Misinterpretation leads to a barrier of prejudice towards people or things that the audience have not been fully exposed to.
I love your topic, Bryan. I think it's a very controversial issue that needs to be expressed. I also like how you pointed out specific races that have been discriminated against. And I like how you brought in the point that Caucasians also feel like their being discriminated against.
DeleteMy only advice to you is to maybe put more specific instances of discrimination. I saw how to talked about the news discriminating. But I think there should be a variety of examples of your topic.
I really like how you have written your draft it flows very well together. The that your bringing many different forms is great because it supports your arguement. Your definition is really good to , it gives the reader a little information about what your entire essay will be about and have the definition in their mind as well.
DeleteHowever I believe it would be a lot better if you gave more examples , like when you talk about yellow journalism there is a perfect time to include how yellow journalism effected the pachucos , I think you can also include the zoot suiters. But for a draft your essay is sounding pretty good so far .
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DeleteThank you both very much for your feedback and I will be sure to include your helpful information within my final essay before I send it to Ms. Hampton.
DeleteFor many years, the value of a college degree has played a role in being a successful individual. It’s been said that heading straight to college after graduation from high school is a key factor to a wealthy life. “Research suggests that additional education improves overall well-being by affecting things like job satisfaction, health, marriage, parenting, trust, and social interaction.” All this is true, without any college experience, one may not full-fill their lives as wanted.
ReplyDeletePeople claim that going to college only makes their lives worse because of the amounts of money that has to be paid, for example, the tuition, books, etc. What we fail to realize is that there exist scholarships, and loans to help the students pay off some college expenses. Scholarships are not difficult to apply to, for the most part, it is an easy process to do. On another note, college is very beneficial to everyone, especially in the long run. Individuals who do attend college and gets a degree is more likely “to receive greater employer-provided benefits than employees without a college degree.” One of these benefits is health care coverage. Now a day, healthcare is becoming to be a big issue and it’s required for everyone. Very few can be able to afford health care, and this all goes back to having a college education. A person who has a college education is able to get a well paid job, which allows them to get for health care coverage. According to College Board, “70 percent of individuals with a four-year college degree received health insurance.”
The number of highly technical jobs is rising every year and for these jobs, a college degree is essential. “Only 39 percent of the jobs in the 10 occupations require a college education. That's 615,000 jobs.” Earning a college degree opens up a lot of opportunities, although this might sound cliche it is true. Thousands of people who choose to go to college can earn a degree and will have available jobs to take. Not only will they have a job, they will get paid twice as much than a high school graduate. The “investment in higher education will last as long as you live, states co-author Heidi Hartmann. People who get a college degree is more likely to a secure future. “If you have a postgraduate degree, you will make - just in your retirement years - three to five times what a worker with only a high school education or less will earn at age 65 going forward.” The monetary benefits outweigh the negative aspects of college, even at an old age, near retirement, college is able to reassure a wealthy life. In other words, college can be viewed as a smart investment.
At the end of it all, college education is a better option than just a high school diploma. It gives individuals a higher quality of life.
Jazmin I was not sure if your first body paragraph was your counter argument or not. If it is you should consider mentioning the huge debts that college students are graduating with. Using this information and countering it will make your essay stronger.
DeleteThere are a couple of grammatical errors in your essay. You should put it on grammarly, so that you can fix the errors. You should vary the way you cite your evidence.You should also consider giving examples of people who used college degree to be successful, or use an example of someone who didnt use a college education, but still became successful; such as Bill Gates, Mark Zuckerberg, and Steve Jobs. You can use one of these for your counter argument.
Thanks for your feedback, I will make sure I check my work on grammarly and use examples of people with and without degrees.
DeleteThere are many definitions for prostitution because everyone has there own opinion on what it is.As I looked into definitions I found one that made the most sense to me. "Prostitution" generally means the commission by a person of any natural or unnatural sexual act, deviate sexual intercourse, or sexual contact for monetary consideration or other thing of value. Many are not aware about what types of prostitution there are in the world. generally speaking prostitution is associated with women , prostitution can be committed by all genders , whether being male,female or transgender. People do not understand the difference in the way prostitution can be between genders. There are many forms of prostitution such as women , men, children , human trafficking , and sex slavery, etc. Most people may not understand why others resort to prostitution or why some believe prostitution should become legal.Some view it as a dehumanizing act while others see it as an occupation that performs a useful service to society. People aren't always able to act out their sexual feelings how they want, prostitution allows them to express these desires.
ReplyDeleteProstitution is said to be be one of the oldest “professions” in the entire world, there a very few who are educated about the origins of prostitution ,oddly enough years ago when prostitution began it was accepted by community due to religious, social, and cultural life reasons. During the 6th century , brothels were government supported in greece by Solon , where Pornai(slave prostitutes) were supplied for a cheap price so that all men could enjoy the pleasure of a women without having to spend so much money. During this time prostitution was highly encouraged as well as remained legal in the greece and roman period. However , soon Christian Roman emperors were extremely against the entire act and it became illegal , but women secretly remained prostitutes to keep their income.
One form of prostitution is teenage prostitution but many are not aware of why teens become prostitutes. "Teenage runaways are particularly vulnerable to pimps. Often, kids who run away from home are fleeing abusive circumstances. With no money, they arrive in cities and seek street contacts for money and shelter. Pimps exploit this circumstance, pretending to befriend girls who are desperate for food and shelter as well as for affection. The pimp might offer them a place to stay and give them pretty clothes as well as drugs. He might even act as a boyfriend. But soon he coerces them to repay him, and they are forced into prostitution." Teenagers who have homes and are stable are not likely to become prostitutes because their lives have already been complete and no need to run away. however there are those who live dangerous lives and must deal with so much abuse therefore they leave their homes and look for comfort and pimps take advantage of vulnerable teens . Proposition usually begins with teenagers because they are so naive and don't know much. Pimps then take advantage of young girls in order to use and abuse them. Young prostitutes soon become drug addicts because they are being controlled by their pimps and they have no choice but to obey. Many may say if a girl wants to change her life around and not be a
Deleteprostitute she can just leave. But, many do not understand that it is not that easy, prostitutes most of the time are brainwashed by their pimps so they know they can not leave, and if they do leave there may be a consequence.
Many have misconceptions of prostitution and why women most of all resort to it. Most people believe that prostitution should not occur, because it is a disgrace and shameful.Prostitution can be such a broad topic however women should be given the right to become prostitutes if they please. "Kimberly Klinger, a freelance writer who focuses on race, gender, and class issues, argues that women have the right to be prostitutes. She believes that prostitutes and the women who support their rights can and often are feminists. Furthermore, Klinger asserts that legalizing, or at the very least decriminalizing, prostitution will benefit women and society as a whole by regulating industry practices and keeping the choice to sell sex available to all women. . . "Women need to have the right and freedom to choose how to live their lives as sexual beings. This includes prostitution.".One reason why women should be allowed to be prostitutes by due to their gender. Yes there are men prostitutes in the world , but the are not looked down upon the way women are, gender for one should not matter whether if you are a prostitute. If women want to be prostitutes , they can its their body they should be allowed to do as they please with it. Why should a women be judged for being a prostitute but men are not.
DeleteBesides children and women prostitution there are many forms of prostitution like brothel prostitution and escort prostitution. Brothel prostitution is a pretty old form , it is where women or men sign up and dedicate their time inside the brothels like an actual career.
Mental illness stems from an early age. The first symptoms of mental illnesses start in the adolescent stages of life. If not treated, these illnesses could become more severe in adulthood. Unfortunately, most early stages of mental illness are not treated. They are simply not seen or ignored. The issue of adolescent and teenage mental illness is widely overlooked.
ReplyDeleteAdults don’t recognize teenage mental illness. Statistics show that “...1 in 5 young people suffer from a mental illness”. This mental illness can be an anxiety disorder, a mood disorder, etc. Adults choose to ignore the signs. They write it off as ‘teenage drama’. Due to this label, a lot of mental disorders present in a high school setting are overlooked. Anxiety disorders, for example, are the most common in teenage individuals. Phobias, social anxiety, and panic disorders are all mental health issues. Yet, when teenagers try to reach out for help dealing with these issues, they are looked at as ‘complaining’ or ‘not being able to cope with reality’. These kind of reactions cause teenagers to keep these issues to themselves and not seek help.
Some people would argue that most teenagers don’t seek help with their mental issues so how are their parents or teachers supposed to know their having these problems. “75% of teenagers hide their day to day problems from their parents”. Teenagers are very good at hiding issues from their parents. Whether the issue is bullying or a bad grade, parents usually don’t find out about it until it’s too late. Other people would argue that parents just don’t know enough about mental illnesses to recognize the signs in their children. This factor mainly has to do with that fact that “ only about 4 percent of the total healthcare budget is spent on our mental health”. It’s not a parent’s fault that the healthcare system doesn’t recognize mental illnesses as real diseases. Without the proper knowledge, how could they notice their child’s silent cries for help?
What many parents and teachers don’t realize are that the signs of mental illness are large. It’s usually not a small change that just happened one day. For example, the signs of teenage depression are moodiness, behavior change, lack of motivation, uninterested in regular hobbies, etc. These are symptoms that are pretty noticeable. If an adult took the time to notice a change in a teenagers behavior, then they would realize that the individual needs help.
I really like your topic morgan, because not everyone talks about mental illnesses or are even aware of the damage that those disorders or illness have on people. I like how you are citing your evidence because I flows very well and it sounds straight forward , I also like your analysis and how you are talk about how we/government budgets for healthcare, i believe that should be stressed a little more .
ReplyDeleteHowever , I think your introduction should be fixed a little to make it more engaging. You can start off with giving a scenario about someone that has a mental disorder , so that people can show sympathy in a way . You should include history of mental disorders so your readers can get a little background and can understand some illnesses more. But i really did enjoy reading your essay it sounds good so far.
Privilege in America
ReplyDelete“Privilege, particular white or male is hard to see for those of us who were born with access to power and resources. It is very visible for those to whom privilege was not granted. We need to clear that there is no such thing as giving up ones privilege to be ‘outside’ the system. One is always in the system. The only question is whether one is part of the system in a way that challenges or strengthens the status quo”
-Frances E. Kendall, Ph.D
Privilege is a special right, advantage, or immunity granted or available only to a particular person or group. At a young age, people do not realize that some groups of people are born with privilege and are protected by institutions because of their gender and skin color that society finds acceptable. Men and white people are granted male and white privilege. They, specifically, go their whole lives without realizing that they are granted that privilege that other minority groups do not. Why? According to Frances E. Kendall, PhD states that “many white people [and men] don't feel or as if they have privileges that others do not. It is sort of like asking fish to notice water or birds to notice air. For those who have privilege - its normal”. The problem with this issue is their lack of knowledge or awareness of their privilege, that tend to lead these groups to brush off or ignore the voices of the oppressed instead of lending their voices to speak out on inequalities amongst minorities. They refuse to acknowledge that their actions and thinking can either negatively or positively impact minorities.
One of the many questions that come up in many discussions is whether privilege exists. Privilege does exist, we see it everywhere in our society. From the wage gap to how we treat students at school. For example, in the workforce, white men get paid higher wages than white women and women of color. This is because of male privilege that men and women assemble different amounts of human capital over the course of their lives and careers which perhaps causes the wage gap. Men typically possess more human capital than women, which explains why they are paid more. Women are segregated into jobs that pay less (ex. secretaries and nurses) and into industries that become female dominated (ex. teaching), which lowers the pay in those industries. White men are used as the comparison in this example because they “make up the largest demographic group in the labor force”. Male privilege allows men to freely roam any career or industry without the worry of being discriminated by gender or being paid less. This is not always the case for white women or women and men of color.
On the other hand, people may question why I'm generalizing groups like “men” and “white people”. As mentioned earlier, men and white people make up the largest geographical groups in the workforce and institutions that have impact in society in general. Its important to label them as such in order to avoid derailing arguments and point of views.
Captivity is defined as “ the condition of being imprisoned or confined”. People take wild animals from the wild and hold them in captivity for distinct reasons, however, the majority of exotic animal are exploited in the entertainment industry. No living creature should be stripped of their freedom and be forced to to do things they don’t want to.
ReplyDeleteMost of the time, exotic animals in captivity are mistreated. Circuses that feature animals are just one of the many abusers of abducted wildlife. According to the article “The Problem with Circuses” animals in the circus industry “ remain involuntary participants in a degrading spectacle, performing not because they want to, but because they are forced to." The way the animals are trained is the worse part. A lot of the facilities practice using “ hooks, chains, whips, electric prods, and blunt instruments” as part of their daily methods to condition the animal. These training methods can cause psychology trauma to the animal and therefore make it not a safe environment for the animal itself, for the trainers, and for spectators as well. Big cats such as lions, tigers, and bobcats are sometimes declawed to make them less of a threat to their trainers. In” Big Cats in Las Vegas Still need your Help” the author mentions Arthur’s Wild Magic show, a magic show that took place in the Harrah’s resort and casino in Las Vegas. The show featured a variety of big cats. In a random inspection “two tiger enclosures were found with chewed edges that were splintering” and two tigers and a lion were discovered missing their claws.
Declawing is a very dangerous and painful procedure. In cats, the claw is part of their bone. For the claw to be removed, the whole last joint of their paw must be removed as well. this is very painful for the animals. There have been cases where cats lose their ability to walk because their paws become flat and can no longer support their bodies. Trainers know that these animals are dangerous, otherwise they would not feel the need to remove the animal’s “weapon”.
Some may argue that captivity helps preserve endangered species. There is a big difference between conservation and exploitation. A lot of theme parks that also act as an “animal rescue facility” such as Sea World and Miami’s Seaquarium claim
I think your topic is really interesting and is a serious issue. I like how you used specific examples in your essay like the circus. I also think that in the part where you explain declawing it is helpful for the reader to know what it means.
DeleteAlthough your counterargument is pretty strong, I think you could add a little more evidence to strengthen it even more. I think you could also talk about the different types of captivity there is just to give the reader more background.
Daisy I think that you did very well in appealing to the readers emotion. As I read your essay I felt bad about animals in captivity. I feel that your evidence is good, but I feel that your essay needs more of it.
DeleteYour counter argument was too short, but I feel that it can be strong if you add more evidence and analysis to it. You could maybe give what parks like sea world say about their animals being captive.
Global warming can often be something that can be overlooked. Although, global warming is something that significantly impacts the environment and the future. Global warming should be something that should be acknowledged.
ReplyDeleteGlobal warming is something that has often been regarded as myth although there is a lot of scientific evidence that shows otherwise. The greenhouse gases are something that contribute to global warming other than humans. Greenhouse gases like water vapor, carbon dioxide, methane, and nitrous oxide. This causes the earth to retain the heat that is supposed to be released back into the atmosphere. “changes to near-surface air temperatures will likely influence ecosystem functioning and thus the biodiversity of plants, animals, and other forms of life.” These changes in the atmosphere will begin to affect us and the way we usually live and the comfort people are used to living in. “Our ability to adapt is one of our greatest strengths as a species. But in this case, the medicine could feed the disease.” Temperature changes will begin to change the way animals migrate and begin to change the weather cities are used to having. The amount of wildfires and droughts will increase and the weather will become more severe. These changes in our environment will lead to dramatic rainstorms that lead to floods.
Deforestation is an example of how humans contribute to global warming. This is an action that contributes to global warming because it is getting rid of all the trees that can potentially absorb some of the CO2 . Despite humans thinking that they do not have much of an impact on the environment , the truth is that every persons action changes the environment in some way. “Population growth, increases or decreases in air pollution, increased ability to purchase air conditioning or automobiles, and other social and economic changes are difficult to pin down decades into the future.” The accessibility of these luxuries to people are wearing out the environment and we are slowly finishing the resources our environment needs to survive.
Some people may argue that global warming is not real. Although, a growing population has changed the air pollution, and the night heat has gradually increased over the past 50 years as well as the number of droughts
These negative effects of global warming are too obvious to be hidden or to be regarded as myth. Global warming is real and has the possibility of changing our living conditions dramatically. Greenhouse gases as well as irresponsible actions from humans can lead to a planet no one want to live on. There are many actions that humans can take to improve these conditions.
Yesenia I like your draft, although I think it could improve. I especially liked how you choose to explain how global warming occurs and what are the effects of it. Also, how you chose to give examples of ways people contributes to global warming. I think it gives awareness to the readers.
DeleteAnother thing that I liked was how you talked about how global warming can be a big problem in the future due to population growing and increasing air pollution.
Myths, the source of all the tales and creatures that fill the imagination. But how did they originate? Some may say that it is nothing more than the people of the ancient world’s overactive fantasy and should be dismissed as such. Even if the creatures, journeys, and tasks seem unreal to the us in the modern world, there is always some sort of truth in every story. The tale may be itself may be proven unreal but one should never jump to it conclusions.
ReplyDeleteIn the mythological world, the most iconic things that spark the audience’s are the monsters and creatures that live in them. One of the top creatures is the dragon, a giant fire-breathing reptile known for flying and terrorizing villagers. Now to the curious and explorative, the question is what could have cause the ancients to believe this sort of monster to exist. We would have to look at not the animals alive at the time but the animals that best match the description. The first type of beast that could come to mind are dinosaurs. It makes sense the people of the past could have found to fossils of these titans while mining for metal ingots or could have simply come across a surfacing fossil. Although to most famous, dragons weren’t the only monsters brought to a new life from fossils. Cyclopes are another form of monsters brought up in many of the greek myths. The giants had a trade-mark feature: it only had one huge eye in the middle of its face. There were many ways this creature could have come into existence. For starters in some myths, Cyclops were seen as master blacksmiths, this could have came from the blacksmiths in the past. The people in charge of making weapons would normally cover one eye to prevent flying sparks from blinding them in both eyes. Another thought, could be that some babies were born with only one eye in the middle of their head; this birth defect is known as cyclopia, a very rare condition where the eye sockets don’t properly form in the womb. However in the documented cases of the rare condition none born with it have lived more than a few months. However the main reason for this myth to be born wasn’t even human, it was a pachyderm. Elephas falconeri, also known as the dwarf elephant, had a skull that was about twice the size of a human’s. The eye sockets of the animal’s fossil, however, were relatively small and easy to miss. The nasal cavity, for the trunk, could have easily be mistaken for a eye hole.
Feedback- Bryan, you start off with an engaging hook, but as I continued reading I felt that you should of rewrite that last sentence of your intro, it sounds a little confusing.
DeleteI would recommend looking at other myths/ legends. Look into where myths also originated because I do know the most popular ones are from Greece so maybe revolve your essay around that and the misconceptions people make with religion.
Topic: Drunk Driving, drunk drivers should be punished at their first offense.
ReplyDeleteThroughout the years driving drunk has been an issue throughout the United States, that’s why the state of California has a tolerance of 0.08% alcohol that you can have in your system while driving. Yet there are many laws that protect the citizens when it comes to driving drunk, some are unfair because anything can happen when drivers are conducing under the influence and are putting other citizens in danger. Even though I feel like drunk drivers should be punished at their first offense, I believe that the police should have higher technology to determine if the driver is really under the influence.
As I stated above I believe the police should have and enforce a stronger technology when it comes to determining who is driving under the influence and who is not. Many citizens are faced with punishments that shouldn’t be aimed towards them because of a simple mistake. “Drunk drivers are a problem," said Patricia Perry, of the American Civil Liberties Union. "However, we do not believe it is legal to take people's cars before they are ever convicted. "The U.S. justice system is based on the idea that defendants are innocent until proved guilty, say opponents of Giuliani's plan. They argue that seizing drivers' cars when they are arrested assumes that defendants are guilty before they are tried,” (ic.galegroup.com). As I went on and researched on opposing viewpoints I found an article about drivers being arrested for their first offense even though they might have been innocent. I feel like this is a good article but I don’t agree with the fact that even though the drivers were found innocent they were still arrested. I feel like that’s why we have all these high & improved technology that lets us know if someone has been drinking under the influence. If the Breathalyzer shows that the driver wasn’t driving drunk but did drink a bit they should still get a notice to go to court & have a punishment, but not go to jail.
As we go further into researching the laws or suggestions of drunk driving there is also a side that makes us question why California has a percentage tolerance of alcohol and other countries don’t. Having a 0.08% tolerance probably makes us look flexibly when it comes to laws and pleasing citizens but that is a very odd way to see it. Being flexible and putting other lives in danger because someone was driving under the influence is ________. “In some countries, including the Czech Republic, Hungary, and Nigeria, it is illegal for people to drive with any amount of alcohol in their bloodstream,” (ic.galegroup.com). Many countries like the ones stated above in the quote have it illegal for their driver to conduce under the influence. In a research by nhtsa.gov shows a chart that the percentage of alcohol involvement in Austria is 8.5% at .05 or higher (1998), in Belgium 8.9% had any alcohol (1998) illegal BAC is .05, yet in the United States 38.6% at .01 or higher, 30% at .10 or higher illegal BAC .08 or .10, depending on state (1998). This shows that the percentage is really high in the United States were the tolerance is more flexible than in other countries.
For as long as humans have walked upright, art has been a staple human characteristic. Wherever humans went, art was sure to follow. This began as simple cave paintings and rock drawings and evolved into a nearly infinite amount of different styles, movements, and disciplines. Art eventually evolved into what what is commonly known today as the classical period of art: A time where some of the fundamental principles of art, i.e, perspective, movement , etc. were first pioneered. It was a time of traditionalist and precision; if one’s art was unlike the normal, it was widely considered inadequate. This time period is considered to be vastly different( as well as superior) to modern art, which centers more on innovating, pushing boundaries, and questioning the very nature of art itself. However, to believe the two eras of art to be extraordinarily separate from the other is an incredible misunderstanding. Rather, the modern, rebellious, surrealist nature of art is simply an evolution of the traditionalist, precise nature of classical art.
ReplyDeleteIt would be remiss of me not to acknowledge the obvious differences between the two artistic periods. The mediums, for one, were immensely different. For instance, in the 17th century, many to used oil paints on some form of wood create images. The Mona Lisa, for instance, was painted on popups using oil paints. Nowadays, people can use digital technology (i.e., tablets, smart phones, computers, etc.) to create art on a digital plane. This may (and probably does) account for some difference. Modern-day technology, however, has developed partially in the hopes of recapturing older artistic mediums through a screen and a stylus. Many settings on an art tablet, for instance , include an oil paint and pencil setting, allowing modern day artists can reproduce roughly the same effects as artists from the past. If anything, the two mediums are distinguishable by their ease of use. With modern day technology, any line or brush stroke you make on a device can be erased with a simple push of a button. Classical artists often didn't have this luxury; every line was precious as every line was permanent. Furthermore, classical painters had limited resources; paint could run out and paper could be hard to find. With technology, however, the only thing one is in danger of running out of is their battery. This, perhaps, partially accounts for why modern art is so much more experimental than classical art; modern artists have the resources to fail as many times as they like and keep on trying, whereas, in the classical period, artists had a finite amount of resources to create works of art that would last for ages.
Another apparent difference between the two time periods is the subjects that artists painted. Classical era art was prolific in the area of religious art. There were scores and scores of paintings that outlined the crucifiction of Jesus, the plight of Daniel, and other famous religious events. “Art for him(the artist) did not consist in the search for the hidden laws of beauty - for him it could have only one aim, the aim of all religious art in the Middle Ages - that of providing a sermon in pictures, of proclaiming the sacred truths as taught by the Church. The central panel of the Isenheim altarpiece shows that he sacrificed all other considerations to this one overriding aim. Of beauty, as the Italian artists saw it, there is none in the stark and cruel picture of the crucified Savio”. The same cannot be said of artists today, however. Artists today explore a number of different subjects with their art that include far more than just religious imagery. They create images based off of movies they have seen or tackling a political issue they feel is important. However, while the two types of artists largely painted different subjects, they were similar in that they painted subjects that they felt mattered to them. In the classical era , there is no question that religion was a much more integral part of the average citizen’s life than it is in modern day, which is perhaps more secular than the modern world. Those in the modern world , as such, focus on other, more secular pursuits such as film and politics. While there is no question that the two artists painted different subjects, there it is more than reasonably to assume that they painted for the same reasons.
DeleteConcerning religion, while it is true that the world has become more secular, there are certainly still those who paint religious works. Two of these works provide insight into how never really changes;it simply evolves.
DeleteThe crucifixion of Jesus Christ is perhaps one of the most ubiquitous subjects in all of art history. No matter what era one looks at, they will almost certainly find at least one artist's interpretation of the famous event. This is in part due to the widespread nature of the three monotheistic religions(Christianity, Judaism, and Islam) and the importance of this scene in those religions. Two of the most famous depictions of the crucifixion are Peter Ruben's Elevation of the Cross(1610) and James Tissot's Crucifixion, as seen from the Cross(1890);both works are emblematic of their respective time periods and, together, illustrate nicely the adaptive yet constant nature of art.
To say that the two paintings are dissimilar is an understatement. The two paintings are, at first glance, wildly different;one use Northern and Italian Renaissance techniques to depict the raising of Jesus on the cross, the other use subtlety and realism to show Jesus' point of view during the Crucifixion. Nonetheless,they both have fundamental similarities. One such similarity is their use of depth. The former uses an early version of foreshortening to create the illusion of depth within the image, making Christ's feet seem closer to the audience than his head by placing them lower on the page. However, at the time this painting was made, perspective and depth in art were still relatively new concepts, and, as such, their usage is very subtle in this painting. By the time the Crucifixion, as seen from the Cross is made, these ideas have been expanded and refined. This is seen in how the painting plays with eye level and depth in many different ways. For one, the Virgin Mary is placed at the very bottom of the painting, her figure cut off by the bottom of the frame. To understand why this is significant, one must understand the point of view showcased in the painting. As stated above, the painting illustrates the point of view of Jesus on the cross. In the painting, there is a crowd of biblical figures come to watch his Crucifixion with the Virgin Mary being the closest to him and the crowd and trees being the farthest. In the renaissance era, it would have been near impossible to show this kind of depth. Tissot, however, has learned from the era and, as such, knows of a perspective rule that is a modern-day commonality: the closer something is to the audience, the lower it is on the page(and vice versa). As such, by placing Mary so low on the page that she appears to be cut off by the frame, it looks to the eye as if she is the closest to the viewer. This a more advanced usage of a technique illustrated in The Elevation of Christ with Jesus ' feet bring closer to the bottom of the page. Another rule in perspective is that, the closer an object is,the sharper its lines. In this painting, the lines that compose Mary are all sharp and well defined. Conversely, as you move upwards in the painting, the lines become less and less defined until the figures blur together. This understanding of depth is far greater than the understanding of depth shown in The Elevation of Christ. However, it would not have been possible without the ideas pioneered by Ruben and his contemporaries.
Furthermore, the two paintings are notable for their uniqueness. Both artists paint the scene in a manner that was unprecedented. The Crucifixion, as seen from the Cross showed Jesus point of view while he was being crucified while The Elevation of Christ showed Jesus being lifted on the cross. Additionally, while these paintings are similar in that are unique, they are also similar in why their respective artists chose to make them unique. Ruben was alive during a time when Catholicism and Protestantism were at war. Each one vied for religious dominance. Because of the war, paintings were destroyed left and right by the two sides in an effort to limit each other's influence Tissont was Catholic, meaning supported Catholicism's efforts to reclaim religious dominance. The Elevation of Christ was an effort to support Catholicism as it showcased an emotional and powerful image of Christ, which fell in line with the teachings of Catholicism( Khan Academy). Similarly, Ruben created his painting in order to return power to a previous movement, the only difference being that his was not religious. Around the time he painted Crucifixion, as seen from the cross, the artists of Paris were pioneering impressionism and pointillism. These two movements would gain popularity eventually , but, art the time, they were harshly criticized. Tissot rejected these new movements and, instead, focused on realism as seen in his pairing. By doing so, Tissot continued to support a movement he felt was superior in the same way Ruben supported Catholicism. This similarity illustrates how, despite differences in time, artists can have similar motivations.
DeleteSome may take issue with analyzing art as a whole by simply analyzing two paintings by two artists. They might argue that this is much too small a sample size for which to judge trends. A fair point, but it ignores the fact that these were not average, everyday artists; both were widely respected in their own right. They set trends and expanded on already established idea. Furthermore, they both studied at a number of different locations during their respective lifetime ( Ruben learned from both the Northern and Italian Renaissances while Tissot studied from masters in both Paris and France.) Also, the works presented here are considered to be the artist's most famous works( disclaimer: Tissots work was famous for the set it was apart of as well as the painting itself.) These two artists represent the best of their respective eras and, as such, it is not unreasonable to look at the eras through the lens of their works.
DeleteIn conclusion, while there are clear differences between different time periods, at the core, they have definite similarities that outline how similar artists across all time periods are.
“A Mermaid is a legendary aquatic creature with the upper body of a female human and the tail of a fish,”
ReplyDelete-Wikipedia, the free encyclopedia.
The most biggest controversial topic are the ones that are provided with limited evidence. All myths/ legends are told through different types of medias; T.v, newspaper articles, observations, and documentaries/ films. How can we separate fact from fiction, assumption from evidence, and observation. It follows then the idea of taking something that is known to be non-existing, and come to a conclusion as to what we believe is the difference between common observations and evidence.
In 2012, Animal Planet released the documentary, Mermaids the Body Found. The documentary breaks down the Aquatic Ape Theory, a “Proposal that the evolutionary ancestors of modern humans spent a period of time adapting to the semiaquatic existence” (Google). Going back through a several billion years ago, a group Homosapians were “found” living on small Islands on the coast of Africa, and over time evolved in to what is believed to now be known as a mermaid. Hence all of the animated footage that references to the Aquatic Ape theory, along with other legendary creatures Megaladon, were all based on fiction.
Society can't believe everything that's presented in the media, according to the article, Fishful Thinking: Five Reasons why Mermaids Can't Physically Exist(FT5R), considering how cold the water gets the deeper you dive in the more likely they are to “1. freeze to death.” Second, “You can't pick and choose... body parts,” that only applies through Natural selection. Keeping in mind that dinosaurs went extinct over billions of years a go, mermaids would have gone “3. extinct,” by now from being, “4. constipated”. Finally there is absolutely, “no physical evidence”(DSN)to prove the existence of mermaids therefore we do not know what they're suppose to look like.
On the one hand, I agree that mermaids would be constipated, nor be able to procreate considering first their unusual anatomy and second making it impossible for their species to survive by not disposing of their own waste. But on the other hand, Deep Sea News, fails to realize that the only reason why sea creatures don't “freeze to death” is because that is their natural environment, also because mermaids are most commonly paired with manatees, they creature have blubber which allows them to stay warm even in the lowest temperatures of the deep. Which also explains why certain body parts have evolved over time because of evolution not because they “picked and choose [their] body parts”(DSN).
There are two explanations for how and why are world was “created”. Creationism which Conservapedia defines as “the belief that the earth and universe and the various kinds of animals and plants were created by God or some other supreme being,” and Charles Darwins Theory of evolution, and the process known as “natural selection” passes beneficial mutations over to future generations(All About Science, Darwins theory of Evolution- The Premise). However, Animal Planets documentary, Mermaids The Body Found, provide us with an alternative theory the existence of mermaids. The Aquatic Ape Theory(AAT), states that our descendants from apes move out from the forests and into the open grasslands of the Savannah”(Aquatic Ape Theory, by Elaine Morgan). During this time period apes specifically Homosapians began living near the ocean which lead them to evolve overtime losing features such as hair, and replacing them with being able to breathing underwater, and growing a tail.
ReplyDeleteRecent studies have shown evidence founded in the humans DNA; Sirenomelia more commonly known as mermaid syndrome is a “rare congenital deformity(1. 5- 4.2 in 100,000 births) characteristic by the fusion of the lower limb, resulting in a structure that resembles a mermaid” (Disturbing Disorders: Sirenomelia(Mermaid Syndrome, The Chirurgeon's Apprentice). In the article Meet 2 Girls With Rare 'Mermaid Syndrome, by Bob Brown, ABC News, only 3 people have been know to have Sirenomelia. One of them is Shiloh Pepin, whom doctors only expected her to “survive for hours, possibly days after birth, but she exceed all expectations”(Daily Mail News). She passed away at the age of 10 Friday afternoon at Maine Medical Centre. Milagros Cerron, a year younger then Shiloh, had her legs successfully separated, nine months after her birth in 2005(ABC News). Finally Tiffany Yorks, 19, is the only person known to have survived Mermaid Syndrome for this long and hopes to be “an intensive care nurse for children”(ABC News). Although Mermaid Syndrome is extremely rare it does exist, and it proves how in our earlier stages of evolution, humans too are mermaids.
Although I should know better by now, I can not help thinking that films, such as; Aquamarine, H2O(Nickelodeon t.v show), The Little Mermaid, Barbie a Mermaid Tale, Harry Potter and The Goblet of Fire, and Pirates of the Caribbean on Strangers Tides all share similar aspects of mermaid descriptions, and characteristic. Many people assume that mermaids are beautiful marine mammals with long hair, and curves living under the sea with all of the fish just like the movies. Nevertheless, scientist believe that the remains of a body found inside a shark contained several structures, instance, the tail shaped as a manatees, an oddly shaped skull, and webbie skin.
Ultimately what is in stake here is discovering the existence of a new species, proving the Aquatic Ape Theory as another possibility of evolution over creationism. In addition, it is better knowing that these creatures exist, but according to the Weekly World News(WWN), the U.S Confirms Existence Of Mermaids, “The U.S government has captured 7 mermaids and that they are being kept at an undisclosed aquarium, where they are being studied”(WWN). Instead we should not reveal their existence to prevent from future extinction along with other aquatic life.
I love how you chose to write about mermaids and of their existence. It really captures the attention to those who would be curious about them and to find accurate evidence if they are truly real. You must have good examples and evidence to defend your claim/position and for the counterargument
DeleteWhen you listed the shows/movies, try not to go a little overboard but it's still good that you've given examples and scientific evidence.
Hey Aaryn,
ReplyDeleteI really like the topic you have here, and you make a good point regarding how similar prostitution and pornography are, save for the social stigma attached to each. I do , however, feel as though you lack evidence. For instance, you could have a quote from a sex worker that highlights how similar the two professions are.
Also, you don't really address any counter arguments within your essay. One that comes to mind is that prostitution has a negative connotation because it is so dangerous for both the sex workers and the customers. This is something you could fairly easily address in your essay.
Discrimination against minorities have always been around in America. During the early making America laws were made to protect the white people. Even police officers only protected the white people. Even though laws now and the CPE claims thy are trying to find a solution to end racism in america's criminal justice system, it still occurs.
ReplyDeleteI am aware of the fact that not all white police officers are unjust and racist. Like during the Mike Brown case. The cop in question, Wilson, was not indicted. Officer Wilson went on nation television and said that "he did as he was trained" (alternet), and that "he would do it again," (alternet). Police officers are trained to follow certain protocols for different types of situations. With the case of Mike Brown, Brown came charging toward the police officer Wilson. Obviously Wilson didn't have to shoot Brown as many time as he did but he was just following protocols. Officers are meant to "stop the threat," (hlntv) and trained to shoot at "center of mass," (hlntv) because if they try and aim for a arm or a leg then bystanders can possibly be at risk or being hit by stray bullets if the officer miss fires.
However, they are white police officers that puts more fear into minorities lives than they do protecting them. "Blacks are extraordinarily skeptical that the system can be fair...,"(washingtonpost). With all they stories about police brutality against African Americans and personal experiences, most African Americans don't trust and dislike the police. Statistics show that one of every four black men under the age 35 said that the police have treated them unfairly," (washingtonpost). That appears to be the case because "it's either the result of their own wrong doing or the wrong doing of others like them," (timwise). Police often use racial profiling when it comes to African Americans. In some cases if a white police officer sees an African American with a due-rag on and sagging pants, they will most likely stop and question them. In a way that is punishing other African Americans for something they had no part of, like the action of other African Americans.
Latin American undocumented immigrants are treated differently than immigrants from other countries. When someone says the words illegal, immigrant, or alien, an image of a brown face is brought up.They do not think of an Irish or German. "Mexicans make up only a narrow majority of unauthorized immigrants..." This shows how some people have a common misconception that most immigrants are Mexican. Some people fail to realize that immigrants come from many different countries.Most people need to get over the stereotypes of immigrants so that they could be more comprehensive.Tourists from other countries get to the United States in different ways. They don't go through the hardships of crossing of borders. Immigrants come from all over Latin America, Europe, Asia, and any part of the world.
ReplyDeleteMany Latinos get discriminated because of the stereotypes. Since immigrants can't get good paying jobs, the laws that the government imposes makes it harder to pay rent. Also, since they can't afford a good education, it is hard for them to get good jobs."A looming issue for Latinos across the country is the proliferation of new local ordinances targeting undocumented immigrants." This should be stopped because it's only purpose is to hurt the undocumented. Undocumented immigrants are seen as Mexican’s that work in the fields picking our fruit or gardening our front yards.
The government is also spending unnecessary money to secure the border.This shows how the government is spending more money on securing the border. Instead of using tax money to regulate the border better, I think it should be used for education or other departments that lack money. Also, some of the weapons that the border patrol uses is very dangerous and causes harm to the people who try to cross the border. If the money were better spent, then the government could focus on problems that affect more people.
Immigrants are sometimes seen as a burden on the United States because they take away from the people born on U.S soil.This evidence shows how American's view immigrants. Some American's view immigrants as a burden on other Americans because they take jobs, housing, and other things like welfare. However, in my opinion, I believe that immigrants take the jobs that Americans are unwilling to take. That is why I believe people change their opinion from thinking immigrants to be a burden to being undecided. However, since the number of immigrants was growing, they were more resentful.
Also, I think that the stereotypes that come with immigrants help sway their opinion. Some Americans might not encounter or form an acquaintance with an immigrant to get to know their story; they might only fall into the stereotypes.The stereotypes that are acquainted with undocumented immigrants should be changed.
Eric Johnson
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Censorship on Pornography
The idea of censorship was created in order to hide the complete truth from citizens believed not ready to see it. There are unlimited reasons why the events in our world should and shouldn’t be censored, and each reason is based off of the reactions of the people. There are moral reasons, religious reasons, political reasons, military reasons, and corporate reasons. When dealing with censorship of pornography that falls into the category of a moral reason, and there has been many arguments against the allowance of pornography for adult’s private uses, but these arguments against pornography can be considered unlawful.
Our society tends to make new forms of entertainment continuously as we progress. The entertainment that has been released to the public on most occasions isn’t positive and has instances of people doing things the average parent most likely wouldn’t want their child doing. Pornography is an example of a “negative” form of entertainment, mostly because it’s not ideal for the younger generation to view, yet 90% of children 8 - 18 watch pornography. This may pose as an argument on why censorship of pornography should be enforced, but there is a political side to this argument that places my point above any other rebuttal arguments. The first amendment grants freedom of speech, and freedom of expression which grants pornographers the right “to express their opinions and to communicate those opinions to others, however mistaken, disagreeable or offensive others may find them” (Stanford Encyclopedia of Philosophy). People have the right to express their wants for entertainment no matter how morally wrong it may appear to be to others. In our society we do not base decisions off of moral thinking, because it would cause our society to primarily be based off of the feelings of the people in power. This could lead to corruption and maybe other disasters which is why we have set laws that help determine the capability of those who abide them.
ReplyDeleteIt seems as if the most offended group of people are the parents who feel helpless to the browsing freedom of the internet. Parents believe pornography to be an insult “to decent family and religious values and deeply offensive to a significant portion of citizens who hold these values” (Stanford Encyclopedia of Philosophy). Most conservatives see pornography as a corruptive form of entertainment that can negatively affect someone’s character and prevent them from living a good life, and abiding by family and religious values. But that does not qualify as a valid assumption for everyone who watches porn. To assume that all people who are introduced to pornography become corrupted is similar to assuming that people’s lives are shaped around the environment they come from. Kendrick Lamar represents a celebrity who started off in the dangerous environment of Compton and rose up to be one of the most successful artists in Hip Hop today. He was not expected to rise above societal expectations for black males. This relates back to the issue of censorship on pornography, because conservatives are trying to block the use of a more sensual type of entertainment being it isn’t ideal to a person’s personal morals. If a person bases their decisions off of morals it is possible to have fixed thinking that prevents a person from seeing the logical perspective of the situation of censorship. It causes no type of physical harm to viewers and encourages people to continue a cycle of creation that our society has used in order to reproduce. The moral feelings of people should not be able to dictate whether or not a very successful source entertainment should be censored or not.
ReplyDeleteI brushed on the argument that pornography isn’t harmful to anyone in the previous paragraph and this idea is a main factor in its defense. Mainstream pornography is a voluntary entertainment which means every person who participates is willing to display themselves and their bodies on video that many people will see. “The women who grace the pages of Playboy, Penthouse, Hustler, Swank, etc. are paid to do so. They have entered into a contract in which they sell their services” ( Study Mode.com). In terms of pornography the services provided are the display of their nude bodies for the masturbatory delight of the many viewers around the world. Opposers will argue that women are harming themselves by displaying themselves so freely and appearing as a tool for others amusement. They also claim that these women are portraying this type of entertainment as their best possible source of income, and state that they are being used as a simple object. But what they don’t realize is that all jobs for pay are examples of “simplified human behavior”( Study Mode.com). An example of this would be if I apply for a job to cook burgers on a grill at Mcdonalds. The manager would hire me to serve a specific purpose and once I put their uniform on I become a tool for profit not a person with complaints and feelings. My very existence in that restaurant would be to serve them for their cause. Pornography does cause the people who participate in it to be simply a tool for hire but, it’s the same for every person who is paid to do some type of work.
ReplyDeleteIn conclusion the censorship of pornography shouldn’t occur since it causes no real harm to our society or the people that watch it. Pornography is not being considered as a positive factor in our society but it is far from having a very harmful negative impact on a person. Pornography addiction is the same as a drug addiction which is mentally harmful. They both trigger the same addictive pathways, but drugs are harmful to the body system and could cause a person’s brain to function psychopathically, while pornography could just increase a person’s sexual impulses. The fact that people are able to spend time criticizing a famous art of entertainment instead of focus on more important topics that affects our society like marijuana legalization. Topics similar to marijuana legalization are more important since they affect the amount of people in our prisons today. Although morally wrong pornography is a form of entertainment that should not be censored mostly because it will be a violation of the 1st Amendment and it would represent a moral change in our society.
ReplyDeleteCultural appropriation is not a prudish form of realism in which artists and others products and/or brands cannot be influenced by cultures that have no involvement with said creations. It is the piracy of a culture, primarily by Westerners, in which they, "tak[e] over creative or artistic forms, themes, or practices by [a] cultural group."
ReplyDeleteAppropriation, primarily occurs in conjunction with artistry. Most of the backlash artists, who delve into a genre away from their inherent culture, receive tends to have to do with race. Much of it is due to the origin of the genre and/or the "credit" the originators rarely ever receive. However, this is not to say people are not free to become involved with other genres. The only stipulation is that they must respect it and then try not to imitate it down to the most minuscule detail. Artists have to make a place for themselves within the genre rather than building off of experiences they have never undergone.
Within the music industry, particularly the rhythm and blues or hip-hop genre, white musicians, in the simplest terms, tend to be perceived as taking from their musician of color counterparts. A optimum example of such behavior is female rapper Iggy Azalea. When confronted about her actions by another rapper Azealia Banks on the Hot .97 FM radio show, “she accused Banks of playing the race card - and, by branding her a bigot, she actually wandered into reverse racism territory. Her response didn't take into account Banks' political points. Instead, it was shaped to make Banks look like the angry black woman - jealous, bitter and obsessive . This retort comes from a blonde, Australian woman who raps in a voice imitating a black American.”
With each new production of work, Azalea has proved that not only does she have very little grasp on why her actions incite such rage, which is due to the fact that, “she seems clueless as to why hip-hop is black dominated, but she's absolutely sure that she deserves a place in it. She's succeeding in a genre with no idea of its social and historical significance." Azalea was born in the suburbs of Melbourne, Australia. Yet, her lyrics depict a life of hard struggle “on the streets” depicted in videos that give her black friends who act as accessories. She is ignorant. She chooses to be so which not only can be viewed as a sign of disrespect for an entire culture and genre, but as an exemplar of how people her blatant disregard for that work and victim role-playing is the default position of almost anyone who is called out when appropriating.
ReplyDeleteThe blame does not solely rest on her. Recording labels, like Def Jam, “[are] intent on signing native acts who rap in their own tongues, because that's where the business is booming.” Def Jams intent to capitalize off of foreign rap artists seems sound. They want artists who rap in their native language and about issues that affect them within their own cultures/countries and/or life. While these artists are using black culture as a basis, they are not merely imitating.
ReplyDeleteWhile cultural appropriation is evident within the music industry, there are also “trends” in fashion. If someone were to attend an outdoor festival today, they would presumably see a plethora of non-indigenous American people donned in Native American headdresses. They are making a mockery of the Native American culture.
They, most likely, do not understand or know of the significance/history behind the headdress nor do most care to know. The thousands of years behind the culture are disrespected. It becomes a fashion trend, a halloween costume, or a mascot.“It was probably inevitable that mass merchandisers would seize on a trend that requires little beyond bowdlerized graphics and ornamental doodads to telegraph cultural reference, and just as likely that items like Urban Outfitter's Navajo Printed Hipster Panty would also turn up soon enough to inflame Native American sensibilities.” In this instance, Navajo dress was turned into a novelty. Once all historical context is lost and traditional wear becomes a fashion statement, it is "derogatory".
This is not to say that only Westerners appropriate culture. Granted, most countries aren't the melting pots that Western countries are. Countries, like, Japan and India can even be considered isolationists in terms of demographics. They see little reason to integrate other cultures with there's. Whereas, the U.S. and England “borrow” relentlessly. However, they do not always do it in a respectful manner nor do they give credit where credit is due.
“A Mermaid is a legendary aquatic creature with the upper body of a female human and the tail of a fish,”
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Both, myths and legends are told through different types of medias; T.v, newspaper articles, observations, stories/ fairy tales, and documentaries/ films. The most common mermaid story is Disney Princess Ariel, the Little Mermaid, I remember as a young girl I would going to Disneyland, and seeing Princess Ariel made me and every other children believe that mermaid are real. Of course as we get older we learn that fairytale lands; Atlantica/Atlantis, Agrabah, Pixie Hollow, Neverland, and Wonderland, are imaginary lands and kingdoms that don't exist in our real world. Many people would assume that mermaids exist because they are known to be found “living” in Atlantis, however others believe that mermaids are nothing more than myth.
In 2012, Animal Planet released the documentary, Mermaids the Body Found. The documentary breaks down the Aquatic Ape Theory, a “Proposal that the evolutionary ancestors of modern humans spent a period of time adapting to the semi-aquatic existence” (Google). Going back through a several billion years ago, a group Homosapians were “found” living on small Islands on the coast of Africa, and over time evolved into what is believed to now be known as a mermaid. Hence all of the animated footage that references to the Aquatic Ape theory, along with other legendary creatures Megaladon, were all based on fiction.
Society can't believe everything that's presented in the media, according to the article, Fishful Thinking: Five Reasons why Mermaids Can't Physically Exist(FT5R), considering how cold the water gets the deeper you dive in, the more likely they are to “1. freeze to death.” Second, “You can't pick and choose... body parts,” that only applies to Natural selection. Keeping in mind that dinosaurs went extinct over billions of years ago, mermaids would have been “3. extinct,” by now from being, “4. constipated”. Finally there is absolutely, “no physical evidence”(DSN)to prove the existence of mermaids therefore we do not know what they're suppose to look like. Most of the evidence provided through the media is made through computer graphics or seals that people confuse for a mermaid.
On the one hand, I agree that mermaids would be constipated, nor be able to procreate considering first their unusual anatomy and second making it impossible for their species to survive by not disposing of their own waste. But on the other hand, Deep Sea News, fails to realize that the only reason why sea creatures don't “freeze to death” is because that is their natural environment, also because mermaids are most commonly paired with manatees, specifically for their tail and their blubber allows them to stay warm even in the lowest temperatures. As a result, certain body parts have evolved over time because of evolution not because they “picked and chose [their] body parts”(DSN).
There are two arguments as to how and who “created” the earth. Creationism which Conservapedia defines as “the belief that the earth and universe and the various kinds of animals and plants were created by God or some other supreme being”. Charles Darwins' Theory of Evolution, and the process known as “natural selection” passes beneficial mutations over to future generations(All About Science, Darwins theory of Evolution- The Premise). In other words, “Survival of the Fittest”, a phrase used for both society and the animal kingdom meaning only those og high rankings are more likely to survive. However, Animal Planets documentary, Mermaids The Body Found, provide us with an alternative theory the existence of mermaids. The Aquatic Ape Theory(AAT), states that our descendants from apes move out from the forests and into the open grasslands of the Savannah”(Aquatic Ape Theory, by Elaine Morgan). During this time period apes specifically Homosapians began living near the ocean which lead them to evolve overtime losing features such as hair and replacing them with being able to breathing underwater and growing a tail.
ReplyDeleteRecent studies have shown evidence founded in the humans DNA; Sirenomelia more commonly known as mermaid syndrome is a “rare congenital deformity(1. 5- 4.2 in 100,000 births) characteristic by the fusion of the lower limb, resulting in a structure that resembles a mermaid” (Disturbing Disorders: Sirenomelia(Mermaid Syndrome, The Chirurgeon's Apprentice). In the article Meet 2 Girls With Rare 'Mermaid Syndrome, by Bob Brown, ABC News, only 3 people have been known to have Sirenomelia. One of them is Shiloh Pepin, whom doctors only expected her to “survive for hours, possibly days after birth, but she exceed all expectations”(Daily Mail News). She passed away at the age of 10 Friday afternoon at Maine Medical Centre. Milagros Cerron, a year younger then Shiloh, had her legs successfully separated, nine months after her birth in 2005(ABC News). Finally Tiffany Yorks, 19, is the only person known to have survived Mermaid Syndrome for this long and hopes to be “an intensive care nurse for children”(ABC News). Although Mermaid Syndrome is extremely rare it does exist, and it proves how in our earlier stages of evolution, humans too are mermaids.
Although I should know better by now, I can not help thinking that films, such as; Aquamarine, H2O(Nickelodeon t.v show), The Little Mermaid, Barbie a Mermaid Tale, Harry Potter and The Goblet of Fire, and Pirates of the Caribbean on Strangers Tides all share similar aspects of mermaid descriptions, and characteristic. Many people assume that mermaids are beautiful marine mammals with long hair, and curves living under the sea with all of the fish just like the movies. Nevertheless, scientist believes that the remains of a body found inside a shark contained several structures, instance, the tail shaped as manatees, an oddly shaped skull, and webbie skin.
Ultimately what is in stake here is discovering the existence of a new species, proving the Aquatic Ape Theory as another possibility of evolution over creationism. In addition, it is better knowing that these creatures exist, but according to the Weekly World News(WWN), the U.S Confirms Existence Of Mermaids, “The U.S government has captured 7 mermaids and that they are being kept at an undisclosed aquarium, where they are being studied”(WWN). Instead we should not reveal their existence to prevent from future extinction and experimentation on any aquatic life.
Argument Research Paper Outline
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• Intro: “In the Bible, David calmed King Saul's moods by playing the harp. Egyptians used music to calm their insane, and their mighty pyramids, were built to the rhythmic beat of it.” The increasing empowerment pertaining to music emphasizes on the daily aspects of an individual, hence music should be represented into the culture as a positive.
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• Opp claim + supports: Certain genres like hip hop and rock are responsible for the violence and troubles in teens today.
o Rebuttal: Sebasstien Elkouby who has worked several years with teens in school, and juvenile detention centers, states that “mainstream rap music can’t be blamed for all of today’s social ills as unemployment, poverty, gangs, drugs, failing school system, and institutionalized racism are the real culprits,”
• Opp claim + supports: Some might argue that music is able to cause some to go deaf. This occurs when, “noise levels above 110 decibels strip[s] insulation from nerve fibers carrying signals from the ear to the brain. Loss of the protective coating, called myelin' disrupts electrical nerve signals.”
o Concession: While it is true that listening to loud music can cause someone to go deaf, it is under the responsibility of an individual to not exceed the volume limit that some devices warn of.
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• Subclaim + supports: Music is able to make one feel good. According to asapSCIENCE, music causes the release of a neurotransmitter in the brain called dopamine, which is said to be, “a chemical responsible for making you ‘feel good’.”
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• Subclaim + supports: Certain genres of music have several benefits. Listening to rock music can allow for: motivation, mood regulation, stimulation, and identification.
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• Subclaim + supports: Music helps people concentrate. Classical music like, “Mozart, Brahms, and Bach--shifts the brain's activity from beta to the higher awareness alpha waves,” and “this type of music lowers stress and increases concentration,”(Meyer, Roger H.). Music can narrow an athlete’s focus, as well as people in search of a good workout. The use of music allows the heart to beat faster, which allows for a more efficient workout.
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• Subclaim + supports: Music has been able to help improve neurological functions in certain people. Summa Chadwick, Martha, in her article, "The power of music: the use of music protocols to enhance neurological function," informs about a boy named Jimmy Miller; who at a young age was diagnosed with pervasive developmental disorder (PDD) and used music as a therapy that would result in an improvement in his motor funtions.
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• Conclusion: Music alters our bodies in ways that help to improve functions in the brain, and causes certain moods to be activated. Several genres have different benefits for several people, and one can see how music can outweigh the negatives that music holds. Due to all this music should be a part of everyone’s daily lives.
Topic: The Exploitation of Workers
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• Essay Opener: Everyone knows that where there is something that is capable of giving profit, then exploited it will be. -DORIS LESSING, Shikasta
• Outline of Issues: One side of the argument is that the exploitation of workers not only helps people get jobs but it also helps the consumer to pay less money for goods.
“First we benefit from it by being able to buy cheap products.”The other side of the argument is that the exploitation of workers is bad because employees are paid low salaries and are provided with poor working conditions.
• Position: Even though corporations relocated factories in foreign countries to create more jobs, all they have created is exploitation. In order for this outbreak of exploitation to end, foreign countries need to adhere to the same labor and safety standards as the United States.
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• Opp Claim + Support: If companies were to follow labor standards, the number of jobs for people would decrease because costs would rise.
• Rebuttal: “But fair work is a critical underpinning of social stability. Businesses that respect labor rights put more money in the hands of workers, helping them to educate their children, live healthier lives, and eventually, inevitably, buy American brands.”
• Opp Claim + Support: Workers are their voluntarily. They are not forced to work there. “Workers go there voluntarily, which means--hard as it is to believe--that whatever their alternatives are, they are worse." says Tim Harford the Undercover Economist.
• Rebuttal: Just because workers chose to work in those factories doesn’t mean employers have the right to provide poor working conditions. (I am still looking for some evidence to enforce my rebuttal.)
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• Sub Claim + Support: Corporations move their factories overseas because there are fewer labor laws when compared with the United States. “Companies like Ford come to Mexico to exploit workers, pay low taxes, and avoid environmental regulation. Wages at the Cuautitlan plant average less than $60 per week, he said. There is only one break each eight-and-a-half hour shift."
• More Support:"What is important about this tragedy is that it has thrown into stark relief the fact that this is an industry where the workers are not just exploited and forced to work in an environment of harassment, violence and abuse, but where basic guarantees of safety have been thrown to the wind, where corners have been cut to the extent that a building can collapse on top of thousands of workers."
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• Sub Claim + Support: Another problem is that corporations do not seem to want to end the exploitation of their employees. Nike, the world’s largest supplier of athletic shoes and apparel, chose to end the renewal of a six-year contract with the University of Michigan rather than comply with their "Labor Standards and Human Rights Policy."
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• Sub Claim + Support: Another problem with the exploitation of workers is that it leads to corporations not letting workers join unions. Many companies prefer to fire workers or simply close down a store before letting employees join a union. “When 10 butchers at a store in Jacksonville, Fla., voted to join a union, Wal-Mart simply eliminated their jobs by shipping in pre-cut meats.”
• More Support: “Each attempt to organize there has been met with mass firings and blacklistings.”
• Counter Argument Evidence: "The idea that Walmart negotiated with and made concessions to a labor union in South Africa may seem odd to workers in the United States, where Walmart has developed a reputation as one of the country’s most virulent opponents of organization efforts.”
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• Conclusion: The solution to ending the exploitation of workers done by many multinational corporations is for foreign countries to follow the same labor and safety standards as the United States. The exploitation of workers can not be ignored any longer. Every day that passes new people are joining a workforce where the companies number one priority is to make profit.
Intro: For many years, the value of a college degree has played a role for individuals to become successful. It is said that heading straight to college after graduation from high school is a key factor to a wealthy life. “Research suggests that additional education improves overall well-being by affecting things like job satisfaction, health, marriage, parenting, trust, and social interaction.” All this is true, without any college degree, one may not full-fill their lives as wanted.
ReplyDeleteOpp claim: People claim that going to college only makes their lives worse because of the amounts of money that has to be paid. For example, the tuition, books, and even dorms.
Rebuttal: What we fail to realize is that there exist scholarships and loans to help the students pay off some college expenses. Yes, it may take a while to pay debts, but it will be worth it.
Opp claim: People might say that college is difficult, or it may not be worth the effort.
Rebuttal: College really shows its results in the long run. People with a well paying job and a college degree can have health care when others might not. “70 percent of individuals with a four-year college degree received health insurance.”
Opp claim: Again, people might say that college isn’t necessary, but it is said that it is the other way around.
Rebuttal: “Research suggests that additional education improves overall well-being by affecting things like job satisfaction, health, marriage, parenting, trust, and social interaction.”
Subclaim: It is essential to get a college degree because of the thousands of jobs that require it.
Evidence: “Only 39 percent of the jobs in the 10 occupations require a college education. That's 615,000 jobs.”
Subclaim: As mentioned before, college benefits you more in the long run, and that includes in retirement.
Evidence: “If you have a postgraduate degree, you will make - just in your retirement years - three to five times what a worker with only a high school education or less will earn at age 65 going forward.”
Conclusion: At the end of it all, college education is a better option than just a high school diploma. It gives individuals a higher quality of life.
Intro:
ReplyDeleteEssay opener- I was going to either put the general definition or the “negative” definition.
General- A traditional story, especially one concerning the early history of a people or explaining some natural or social phenomenon, and typically involving supernatural beings or events.
Negative-A widely held but false belief or idea.
include how even though many myths are makeup historical beliefs, that those myths caused some events to be distorted. Also include that ancient myths created them to resemble some aspect of what the saw in real life. That they used it to state what they couldn’t explain.
Position- give a brief statement on how the myths can be based on facts but try not to state thesis.
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People believe that monster are not real, that its someone imagination- say that the each monster is based on something scary that no one could explain
People don't believed some of the the events that happen in mythology sound to technologically impossible - say that there are certain ruins that can prove what the event or place was based on.
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Say how that the beginning and the end found in religion can be proven- true they can't be prove but we could look at all the similarities in the religions and make a connection to human beliefs.
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Some Monsters that are found in mythology can have connection to real life-Dragons and how they are based off of dinosaur fossils.
Counterargument- dinosaur don't explain the other giant monster in mythology. rebuttal- the Cyclops is a giant and it might have came from a dwarf elephant.
The gorgon medusa- how it could have came into being and what other gods came from it.
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Religions- most religions have similar creation stories each of them involving the world being nothing but chaos and darkness. The some divine being comes and creates the world. This could play on the fear of the dark the early humans had.
Counterargument - it can't be proven that there is life or death. Rebuttal- true there no sure fire way but you can look at the similarities and used that. Most of them have some along the lines of the righteous would be gifted and the evil would be damned to burn forever.
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Places- the maze of the minotaur and the wall of troy they were both places were based on actual places. The legends they are associated with have exaggerations but both places are real.
Conclusion:
State the thesis
Summarize all the points made in the paper.
I posted my rough draft on the last post as a mistake, so here's my rough draft without any changes yet.
ReplyDeleteFemale Archetypes and their development into contemporary times.
Everything changes periodically to better suit the current times. Archetypes in the media are no exception to this social adjustment. An archetype can be a very typical imitation of an originally thought out character, or simply a recurrent character seen in many different forms. With female archetypes, however, while there are many archetypes, most are played with the same qualities. Until now. Contemporary times have fought for women being portrayed as they are, without extreme sexual, ditzy, or shy motifs. Along with this battle, another battle has commenced involving men supporting women instead of the commonly seen her supporting him. There are women characters who are admired for being work oriented and headed towards a career, rather than being hated for being a boss. There are male characters that mirror the unemployed demographic because of its current status. Archetypes have become real.
One of the newly developed archetypes, the Hummingbird, plays on women in actuality. The New Yorker defines Hummingbirds as “idealistic feminine dreamers whose personalities are irritants...not merely spunky, but downright obsessive. And most crucially, these are not minor characters.” This is an archetype that centers on heart. A Hummingbird is a hard worker who aims for the moon and won’t settle for the stars, without stepping on people to get there. As of now, women make up 47% of the workforce in the US, with 73% of those working full time. The Hummingbird was constructed to increase this percentage, which is already on its way with a projected 51% increase from now to 2018 (Women’s Bureau). Women like Leslie Knope from the show Parks and Recreation (The New Yorker are made to encourage the increase to go higher. The media’s job is to present people with information while simultaneously inspiring them. Presenting a positive archetype like the Hummingbird encourages women to want to become ambitious, to work for something, and to stay positive. Although the obsessive nature is excessive, it is only added to add depth to the archetype to steep the character in reality, as it may be deemed a flaw.
The Manic Pixie Dream Girl, an accidental misnomer to a very true persona, has been strung up to play the invisible angel on one’s shoulder. This archetype is very similar to the Hummingbird but has an emphasis in whimsicality and has no real depth. The sole purpose of the MPDG is to keep everything positive and support. This archetype has almost no basis in reality, leaving it to only inspire the masses, which is a position it fulfills. Except, there is an addendum. New theories have shown that there are Manic Pixie Dream Boys. Yes, media has been listening to the feminist movement and have made it so the roles are reversed. Women who play the smart, witty recluses and are brought out of their shells by what is deemed the perfect man. Augustus Waters, for instance, persuades Hazel Grace Lancaster to live a life regardless of how short it may be. Jesse Swanson, of Pitch Perfect, does the same with Beca Mitchell to allow her to express feelings she repressed since her parent’s divorce.
Rather than painting women in a negative light, calling them sluts and bitches, the media has done a u-turn to focus on increasing a realistic and positive archetype to follow and embody. In the past, the media has lived to maintain the “big lie” created by media bigwigs, AKA men. The “big lie” was a concept created during the start of film that proclaims women as being inferior to men. This can be portrayed through the clothes, actions, and positions women are placed into when concerning the media. In today’s time, men have receded in many forms of power to allow women to have a say in the going-ons of media
ReplyDeleteP.1
Introduction:
Opener: A definition of discrimination and a definition of media. Explain their relevance to my topic.
Outline of issues: Acknowledge some controversies behind media and then state my opinion on the position and the opposition.
Position: Reveal opinion of topic in the thesis or in the conclusion. I believe that the media is responsible for promoting news that is stereotypical and when doing so I feel like they should be more cautious.
P2.
Opposing Arguments:
Opponent argument: The media reveals information to the public with the desire of educating them of their environment and there is no intention of generalizing against a specific group of people, but it happens.
Researched Supports: “The media claims that their “widespread broadcast” of such issues will lead to change and a better society.” (Racial Profiling and the Media)
Rebuttal: By focusing on the fact that the media unintentionally reveals discriminatory information, they overlook the fact that the media can lists statistics of the topic they are revealing to make it evident that the scenario being depicted does not apply to the people of that race.
Evidence for Rebuttal: “Experts say mainstream media outlets could improve coverage of racial profiling by reporting on whether it’s effective as a crime deterrent and by examining the amount of public resources spent executing the practice. Another suggestion is that the media should report data that challenges stereotypes used to justify racial profiling and personalize the issue by writing features about the victims.” (Improving Media Coverage of Racial Profiling)
Opponent argument: The media does not brainwash people into thinking a certain way of people, the way we are exposed to different races lead to the way we interpret them. In general that is how a majority of these people choose to represent themselves. Blacks are associated with violence/drugs, Hispanics are associated with Border Jumping, Asians are associated with success, and Caucasians are associated with high class.
Researched Supports: “I do believe that there is more interaction and more unfair interaction among police officers, white and black, in the black community than in the white community. And I think some of that responsibility is on the police department and on police departments to train their police officers better and to make their police departments much more diversified.
But I think just as much, if not more, responsibility is on the black community to reduce the reason why the police officers are assigned in such large numbers to the black community. It’s because blacks commit murder eight times more per capita than any other group in our society.”-Rudolph Giuliani (No Such Thing as Racial Profiling)
Rebuttal: I think that Rudolph is mistaken because he overlooks the fact that the media part of a source of influence among the Black community. While watching the news they reveal information of how profitable the drug business is and then they tend to not allow people to think for themselves due to how manipulative their information is.
Evidence for Rebuttal: “The news media have done an inadequate job of reporting on and analyzing the justice system, including corrections policies. As a result, the public is poorly informed and receives little help in thinking about, and exerting an influence on, this crucial piece of public business.Why? Because the daily news media rarely pay attention to ideas. Instead they concentrate on incident rather than condition, and in reporting on incident they focus mainly on conflict, rarely on solutions. The media’s sensationalizing of crime news has contributed to this skewed view of reality. In fact, crime rates have dropped dramatically in recent years, yet appropriations for more and more jails and prisons have risen.” (What Influence Have the News Media Had on Crime and Justice in Minnesota?)
P.3
ReplyDeleteReason for Position
Subclaim: Discrimination from the media leads to the poisoning of people’s minds if they are not educated. People who are not properly educated are usually not able to think for themselves. They tend to believe and unintentionally learn from the news, which may state that “A local middle aged Caucasian man was attacked by an armed African-American that looked like he was in his early 20’s.” The person watching the news will now have the mindset that people of color are dangerous and the next time they walk past an African-American in their early 20’s there is chance that they will now be much more cautious around him because of what they read.
Evidence: “Sociologists refer to this as a mediated culture where media reflects and creates the culture. Communities and individuals are bombarded constantly with messages from a multitude of sources including TV, billboards, and magazines, to name a few.”
Counter Argument: People who are educated should have the decency to determine what is or is not accurately represented information from the media. The media makes little errors and the errors that they make are hardly noticeable and are minor errors.
Subclaim to counter Counter Argument: I believe that the media is responsible for promoting news that is stereotypical and when doing so I feel like they should be more cautious. When a news channel reports that there has been a robbery committed by an African-American, they should proceed to tell the audience the percentage behind robberies committed by African-Americans. If they were to do simple things like this, then there would not be as much anger and upset people towards the media, because they would be seen as presenting facts as opposed to presenting offensive news. An example of the media’s reporting leading to trouble would be Fox 11’s coverage on Paris. This is one scenario of which the news station has made a false accusation based on the limited information they were able to gather, and with time I am sure that this may become the everyday story of communities that feel misrepresented through the media’s release of controversial news if they do not begin to reveal statistics and only the truth. (Breaking News- Fox is Being Sued)
Evidence: “The city of Paris plans to sue Fox News over what it described as derisive on-air comments, a spokesperson confirmed to CBS News. They plan to sue for damage to “the honor and image of Paris,” the spokesperson told CBS News’ Elaine Cobbe. Paris mayor Anne Hidalgo first announced the decision on CNN. Fox News has come under attack in France recently for its portrayal of life in Paris’ Muslim neighborhoods in the wake of the Charlie Hebdo attacks. According to the New York Times, the network has aired segments proclaiming parts of the French capital “no-go zones” for non-Muslims, which the police avoid.”
P.4
ReplyDeleteSubclaim + Evidence: Discrimination among the media has lingered around for nearly centuries, which has caused people to ignore the elephant in the room, even if it is very clear and evident that it is there. I will quickly generalize the basic forms of discrimination that I noticed and can be easily spotted in almost all forms of media before I go into detail of what I noticed while watching cartoons with my little sister. From what I saw it was evident that most men are portrayed as heroes, women are portrayed as helpless or weak (by being gullible, needing to be saved and usually not being in charge, ect.), and most people of color are seen as bad people. My sister and I were watching the original “Looney Tunes” and I recalled this show being so funny to me when I was younger, but now all I could see was how much this show made fun of other races through the depiction of Speedy Gonzales, Slow Poke Rodriguez and the satirical “jokes” of Bugs Bunny.
I watched as Speedy celebrated Cinco de Mayo with other mice that depicted the hispanic race. I heard what I could describe as “typical Hispanic music” playing and every now and then I heard a screech that sounded like a man in a high pitch voice screaming “AYE AYE HEHE HAAAA” My sister laughed at this and found it highly comedic, while I could not believe that this form of racism was aired on a kids cartoon.
As we watched another segment of the show, I noticed another character that represented Hispanics by the name of Slow Poke Rodriguez, who was a rat. This character, unlike Speedy, was remarkably slow and once he was captured by a random Looney Tunes cat he pulled out a gun and shot the cat. This depicted Hispanics as violent and dangerous, which I found to be very stereotypical. In addition to that, I thought that the motif of Rats and Mice to represent Hispanics was a metaphor for the “overpopulation” of the stereotypically large Hispanic families in the US (since rodents multiply quickly at an alarming rate).
The last character that I want to focus on is Bugs Bunny, whom I now resent for a “joke” that he used in attempt to fool Yosemite Sam. In the show, I noticed that Sam was dressed in a confederate outfit standing next to a cannon with the Confederate flag waving above his head, and at that point I thought I was being paranoid, so I ignored that fact. It wasn’t until I heard Bugs Speak in a “Southern Accent” that I realized what was happening. He set foot across an obvious line that glorified South America and was immediately shot back north, but not before being labeled as a “Yankee” by Sam. In an effort to trick Sam, Bugs came back to the south moments later with brown skin, raggedy clothes, a fishing hat, and a banjo with a response from Sam saying “Well... its one of OUR boys.” Eventually, Sam saw through Bug’s disguise as usual and was prepared to attack him until Bugs quickly gave Sam a whip and said with a deep Southern Accent “Dont’ beat me Massa! Please dont beat me Massa! Don't beat this tired old body. Ooh no!” At that point it was beyond evident that this was racist and as I did a little research, I found that this clip was from the 1950’s. This reminded me that discrimination was used nearly 60 years ago to brainwash our children into believing that these people of color followed the stereotypical standard of each corresponding race. (Southern Bugs Bunny & Cartoon Stereotypes)
P.5
Conclusion: People are generally influenced by discrimination without their knowledge. Those who are not properly educated tend to learn from the media and that leads to there being a generalization of the different types of people that they are yet to meet. The news tends to reveal a lot of information that is unfortunately left to be deciphered by their audience and that can sometimes lead to misinterpretation. Misinterpretation leads to a barrier of prejudice towards people or things that the audience have not been fully exposed to.
Citations:
Delete(Improving Media Coverage of Racial Profiling)-
Nittle, N. (2011, December 7). Improving Media Coverage of Racial Profiling. Retrieved March 1, 2015, from http://mije.org/mmcsi/criminal-justice/improving-media-coverage-racial-profiling
(Racial Profiling and the Media)
Zheng, Y. (2014, October 30). Berkeley Political Review. Retrieved March 1, 2015, from http://bpr.berkeley.edu/2014/10/30/racial-profiling-and-the-media/
(No Such Thing as Racial Profiling)
Cobb, J. (2014, December 4). No Such Thing as Racial Profiling. Retrieved March 1, 2015, from http://www.newyorker.com/news/news-desk/eric-garner-racial-profiling
(What Influence Have the News Media Had on Crime and Justice in Minnesota?)
Gilson, G. (n.d.). Council on Crime and Justice. Retrieved March 1, 2015, from http://www.crimeandjustice.org/councilinfo.cfm?pID=63
(BREAKING: Fox News is getting sued)
BREAKING: Fox News is getting sued -. (2015, January 20). Retrieved February 11, 2015, from http://www.youngcons.com/breaking-fox-news-getting-sued/
(Southern Bugs Bunny & Cartoon Stereotypes)
Southern Bugs Bunny. (n.d.). Retrieved February 6, 2015, from https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=iMZfCar-Ks8
Cartoons Stereotype. (n.d.). Retrieved February 6, 2015, from http://www.teenink.com/opinion/discrimination/article/145113/Cartoons-Stereotype/
Outline:
ReplyDeleteP1:
Intro: Definition(quote)
P2:
Opposition: Colorism is the same as racism.
Rebuttal: Colorism is indirect discrimination.
Colorism is created by people of color
Rebuttal: Colorism ideologies were created by white people and originated in slavery.
P3:
Subclaim: Both white people and people of color(concession) contribute to colorism.
Subclaim: Colorism is present in all racial communities.
P3:
Subclaim: The media perpetuates colorism.
P4:
Subclaim: Colorism effects in women.
Support: Beauty industry promotes colorism
P5:
Subclaim: Colorism effects with men.
Support: Job outlook and criminal justice.
P6:
Subclaim: Colorism causes tension and purposefully creates a divide within racial communities.
P7:
Conclusion
Intro:
ReplyDelete-definition/history of racism
-describe the criminal justice system
-thesis/main points
P2:
-opp claim: criminal justice system doesn't single out African Americans because " established by governments to control crime and impose penalties on those who violate laws," (victimsofcrime.org)
- consession
-rebuttal: discuss police history in American (ie: LA riots, MLK march) like brutality
P3: Many police racial profile African Americans
-Counterargument: Police offices are meant to profile to determine the suspect and victim
-claim support: " We found that African Americans, especially younger black men, were far more likely than whites to report being treated unfairly by the police because of their race. In fact, a recent Gallup Poll found that one of every four black men under age 35 said that the police have treated them unfairly during the last 30 days," (washingtonpost).
P4: African American are becoming victims of police officers
-counterarument: committing more crimes
-support: Mike Brown and Eric Garner
Conclusion:
-restate claims
-possible solution
- qoute
P1: Intro
ReplyDeleteOpener: “When any group is not featured in the media, they have to wonder ‘Well, what part do I play in this culture?’”
Outline of arguments:
Pro: Archetypes are becoming more and more realistic as times are changing.
Con: Women are still being unrepresented regardless
Against pro:These realistic depictions may still have traces of negative qualities of past archetypes.
Against con: “There has been to much attention already paid to women. What about color?“
Position: Times have changed to where women have become much more accurately represented in media, as mirrored by men. Problem: It’s not done enough to really break the “the glass ceiling” for women in front of and behind the camera.
P2:
Women have not taken any steps forward and have continued to be typecasted as vulnerable damsels in distress.
Supports: All vulnerable: Kirsten Stewart (Bella Swan), Dakota Johnson (Anastasia Steele), (Catharine Hardwicke (Twilight director). Anti example: Shailene Woodley.)
Rebuttal: Even within these examples, they are developments, very smal, but they are present. Stewart as Bella Swan presented a new perspective on the mysterious new girl who is desired by the whole class; she doesn’t like attention and is very accident prone, thereby not perfect, which shatters the image of the the beauty/ prom queen archetype. Johnson as Anastasia Steele presents the archetype known as Artemis, where characters, specifically women, venture into feelings and hardships never experienced before but work through them based on intuition and courage. Steele explores a sexual ground she has never encountered before and emphasizes her barriers to maintain her self-respect. Swan finds interest in a decades- old vampire but manages to treat him like a human and disregard his many restrictions to protect her because she has her own instincts.
These new archetypes are constructed to portray men in a not-so- flattering light. As dependents, wimps, cads, sadists etc
Supports: Kevin James (dependent), Michael Cera (wimp), William Dafoe (cad), Christian Grey (sadist).
Rebuttal: With the times changing for women, there has been evident changes for men as well. While they are pitted as negative, they are represented based on what is seen in society. 5.3 percent of men are unemployed, with women only having 5.1 percent. The difference is minimal but still impactable.
Women are still excessively sexualized, even in these modern times.
Supports: Megan Fox, Mila Kunis, Keira Knightley, Jennifer Lawrence.
Concession: While it is true that women are still sexualized, even with these modern archetypes, a central aspect of these archetypes is accepting women’s choice to be who they are, to allow them to live without being judged for those decisions. For most of the women playing these parts, they have already accepted that people won’t accept them because of what they have seen media present in the past.
P3: Subclaims + counterarguments
DeletePersonality
Hummingbird- compassionate, optimistic, erratic/eccentric
Manic Pixie Dream Girl- eccentric, bubbly, quirky.
Artemis- decisive, instinctive, curious
Clothes
Hummingbird- business, comfy
Manic Pixie Dream Girl- vintage, retro
Artemis- able to move in, comfortable
Attitude
Hummingbird- idealistic look on life
Manic Pixie Dream Girl- optimistic look on life
Artemis- realist look on life
Past archetypes(free spirit embodies the goddess in women)
Boss/free spirit- woman made of steel, heavily goal oriented, competitive
-sincere, playful, takes time to appreciate
Survivor/crusader- based on instincts, strong perceptive of people, takes care.
-determined, independent, plotting
Free spirit/ waif- sincere, playful, takes time to appreciate
-whimsical, trusting, strong will
Counter: These personalities either encourage women to become ditzy or stoic.
Counter for the counter: The media is made to present the people with information, therefore, these personalities are made to show women that their personality fills some sort of need, for themselves as well as others. For themselves, women would be able to become uninhibited. For others, they can raise one’s spirits, finish a project, and encourage others to try something new.
Compared to men
Hummingbird- boss (ruthless, full of contempt, money hungry)
(Counterargument) Manic Pixie Dream Girl- Manic pixie dream boy
Artemis-warrior/ hero
Men playing these parts
Hummingbird- Kurt Hummel, Chris Traeger
Manic Pixie Dream Boy- Augustus Waters, Jesse Swan,
Sensitive Warrior- Jax Teller, Killian Jones
P4: Conclusion
Change opener to "Our research also revealed that when female characters do exist in media, most are highly stereotyped and/or hyper-sexualized. Consider this: Female characters in G-rated films wear virtually the same amount of sexually revealing clothing as female characters in R-rated films"- Geena Davis
DeleteI look forward to reading your essay about stereotypes on women. This really should be focused on the aspects to how they are treated and how they might react to stereotypical responses or actions.
DeleteThe concept of this should focus on that, but it can also point out to how it relates to men in real life and how their behavior is around women. You can also include the differences from the past like in the 1920s or 50s to how men treated women.
P1:
ReplyDeleteIntro: Introduce the various major affects technology has provided in America and to the world. Also present some hint as to how it has caused an impact to society by helping people and negatively affect them. In thesis, discuss my position as to how technology innovated the world.
P2:
Opp claim: Discuss cyberbullying and its negativity towards teens that lead to depression, death, and false friendships.
Rebuttal: Evidence from a cyberbullied victim article and full explanation
Opp Claim: How social media and technology products keep away family and friends by distracting them with the features,apps, etc. included
Rebuttal: Information about the products such as iphone, google, television networks, etc and how they are greatly affected than a family bond.
P3:
Counterargument: The media proves its innovation and improving the world for its future and advancement
Subclaim: Talk about the current inventions such as self parking cars, saving money with hybrid cars and saving more power and time with smartphones.
P4:
Subclaim: Compare and contrast the use of technology from the past to the present (preferably in 1990s)
Support: Prove how much it has changed the simple things in life to become more easier for a human to accomplish.
P5:
Subclaim: Provide an example from my own life to how technology distracts myself from focus and being attentive
Support: Evidence/Quotes from family in a discussion to how much I use the internet.
P6:
Explain both sides of the views on media and expand more of it before discussing a solution. Possibly hint at the solution for the benefits of technology.
P7:
Conclusion: Have a solution/explanation as to why we should keep the use of technology to get by in the world without the everyday problems we encounter.
ReplyDeleteIntro:
-quote
- definition of adoption/international adoption
- background on fallacies
-thesis
P2:
Subclaim: International adoption is growing in numbers in developing countries
Support: Sub-Saharan Africa and its problem with AIDS
P3:
Subclaim: Problems within the international adoption process allow for kidnapping to occur
Support: China’s one- child policy and leading country for adoption
P4:
Opposition: Prospective parents should adopt within their own country rather than going abroad
Concession: number of orphans in the US today, issues with the process
claim support: description of orphans
Counter argument: Prospective parents should not be forced because the damage is greater internationally compared to the U.S
claim support: Orphanage in Shanghai leading to deaths
P5: Problems with the international adoption leading to gendercide
Support: Neglection of girls in India
Conclusion:
- Solution (Hague Convention)
- summary
-re-statement of argument
Intro:
ReplyDelete-Startling fact to pull audience into the paper.
-Provide context around the situation.
-State thesis
P2:
-Open with claim on how not taxing churches violates the U.S. secular ideals
-Quote to provide evidence for how limiting the IRS violates the separation between church and state.
-Use Catholic church as example to demonstrate how the restrictions on the IRS to audit churches affects the ability to track cash flow.
P3:
-Claim, Not taxing churches places a greater burden on the people of the U.S.
-Statement and evidence to back up claim on how the church uses services provided by the gov. and how they thrive beause of it.
P4:
-Offer counter argument about the usage of churches
-Refute claim using pathos.
P5:
-Open with claim about how taxing churches would actually make a difference.
-Use evidence to put a monetary value on how much the U.S. is losing.
-Provide counter argument claim that taxes do more good for society with out taxes.
-Refute claim using example of the Welfare program.
Conclusion:
-Offer solution
-Restate postion/thesis
Argument Research Paper Outline
ReplyDeleteP1
• Intro: “The City of Champions Revitalization Project includes significant public infrastructure improvements, such as modernizing traffic systems, upgrading streets and creating new public parks.” As a resident, a football stadium is just what Inglewood needed along with the Forums reopening. New jobs. New streets. New everything.
P2
• Opp claim + supports: Economic growth in the community and, “many aspects of everyday life are changed for the better. Buildings and parks are renovated and beautified. Jobs arrive with the increased construction activity and new retail and service businesses. Crime rates decline. As the property tax base increases, so does funding to local public schools. Formerly racially homogenous neighborhoods get an influx of diversity.”
o Rebuttal: Laura Poltras, a filmmaker who worked on the film What is Gentrification? Explains how the “new arrivals impose their culture on the neighborhood, lower-income residents become economically and socially marginalized”
• Opp claim + supports: Some might argue that gentrification gives a sense of convenience the residents living in the community that have more “advanced communication and transport,” and better social integration “which creates better understanding and harmony.”
o Concession: While it is true that the community will have more infrastructure, and racial interaction, there is no denying the social negative impact gentrification will have on the current residents living in Inglewood.
P3
• Subclaim + supports: Housing and renting prices rise. According to A 'Hip' lifestyle of one's, leaves down payyments inflated and once undesired places “become unaffordable for many of the people.” And “suddenly a whole new breed of homebuyer is pulled out of the rental market and into the world of mortgages and home equity.”
P4
• Subclaim + supports: Many cities have been affected by gentrification. Peter Kwong a professor on Chinese Culture states “some politicians and city planners want to see Chinatown turn into a thriving tourist destination and are encouraging the luxury developments of upscale shops and services, without ever considering the impact of the displacement of longtime residents and the impact on businesses that are left.”
P5
• Subclaim + supports: Gentrification also affects schools in low-income communities. “THE CHICAGO BOARD OF EDUCATION has closed or is planning to shut down up to 70 schools.” Resident do have first priority to these schools, but are not granted first choice in charter or contract schools. Majority of Black and Latino student are being left behind due to the cry of gentrifiers wanting new schools for their children.
P6
• Conclusion: Gentrification harms the lower, working class economically, and socially. Gentrification is to increase the profit of the middle upper class instead of the lower class residents. These lower class residents will be displaced due to the higher cost of living.
Intro:
ReplyDelete- History about immigration
- Reasons why people immigrate
- An effect on closing our borders
- A possible effect if we opened our borders
P1:
-Opposition
- Opening our borders can lead to possible increase in drug wars throughout the United States
- Comparing the United States to Mexico
P2:
-Opposition
-Opening our borders during a economic situation can hurt the economy
- exploitation
P3:
- Proposition
- Mass Production in products
- Will fill out the lo skilled jobs we don't need
-Lower prices
conclusion:
- Neutral
-State why both sides have reasonable arguments
Melani Hernandez
ReplyDeleteMs. Hampton
Ap English
28 Feb. 2015
Outline
P1
Introduction
Defining the term mermaid
Support- Wikipedia, free Encyclopedia
Personal experience
Growing up and being exposed to imaginary worlds through Disney, myths, and legends. Overtime believing that certain creatures exist through my own personal beliefs and observations. But also acknowledging the other position.
P2
Explains the difference between creationism (conservapedia) v. theory of evolution( All About Science, Darwins theory of Evolution- The Premise).
Support-
Conservapedia, definition of creationism
All About Science, Darwins theory of Evolution- The Premise, definition of theory of evolution
P3
Aquatic Ape Theory, defends and argues that our world was created through evolution and how mermaids might have separated from the evolution of homosapein to human. An alternative for the theory of evolution.
Support-
Animal Planets Documentary, Mermaids the Body Found
Aquatic Ape Theory, by Elaine Morgan
P4
5 Reasons why Mermaids Don't Exist.
Support
Quote/ reasons from the article, Fishful Thinking: Five Reasons why Mermaids Can't Physically Exist
P5
Subclaim to previous argument from Fishful thinking.
counter argument using it's own evidence.
Support
Quote from Fishful Thinking: Five Reasons why Mermaids Can't Physically Exist
P6
Subclaim- Own personal observations, describing the confusion society has on mermaid characteristics and personalities.
Support
Disney Movies
Tv shows
P7
Rare disease found in humans leads to mermaid like characteristics, with few people that have this rare condition.
Support
Disturbing Disorders: Sirenomelia(Mermaid Syndrome, The Chirurgeon's Apprentice, definition of Sirenomelia also known as “mermaids syndrome”,
Meet 2 Girls With Rare 'Mermaid Syndrome
P8
Recent evidence
Starbucks logo(mermaid)
$1 million dollar reward in Kiryat Yam
Mermaid cuaght on tape form scientist in Greenland
P9
Conclusion
Stating thesis
Discovering the existence of mermaids through: personal experiences, documentaries, social media, and other well known myths and legends.
Quote from Weekly World News
“The U.S government has captured 7 mermaids and that they are being kept at an undisclosed aquarium, where they are being studied”.
OUTLINE:
ReplyDeleteIntro:
Definition of cultural appropriation
explanation of defense
P2:
Artists stealing culture, but do not give credit where credit is due.
P3:
Within music industry…
Iggy Azela
P4:
Claims of reverse racism denounced
P5:
Sign of disrespect
Disregard/ Lack of understanding
P6:
Can use other cultures as a basis
Not outright imitation
P7&8:
Turning cultures into trends
P9:
Appropriation is a good way to reinforce stereotypes
Objectifying
Conclusion:
Cultures must be respected if they are to be borrowed from
Intro:
ReplyDelete-Quote from Francis E. Kendall
-Definition of privilege
-Two types of privilege discussed in essay
-The possible results of privilege
P1:
-Discuss whether privilege exists
-Example and Evidence
-Analysis and Observation
P2:
-Example and Evidence
-tie back to my point
-Analysis and Observation
P3:
-Counterargument presented
-Quote
-Analysis of quote
-Rebuttal of the quote of viewpoint
-Rebuttal quote to counterattack
-analysis
Conclusion:
-explain my position and why
-restate my points and claims